Schemilix

Alright, let me teach you how to critique properly darling. The first thing that strikes me is that this poem is one BIG cliche, so I can't say much about ...

I can tell that was meant to be funny and... It was! XD I snorted a couple of times. Wait what whuh? They named him when he first spoke? Poor ...

Kitty I have to point out the irony here. 'For affect?' That's a grammar slip in itself, hahaha. Now Arcaus 'm not gonna critique because you seem to dislike it, ...

I don't--I don't know. It doesn't make sense. He’s not the kind of abusive father you must think of; he doesn’t crash into the house frothing at the mouth, he ...

OK, I like your theme and how you're saying it, but in places, it could use a minor tweak. Here: On most occasions the flaws do not even exist they ...

Okay so. My name's Schem, and I'm here to review your poem. Welcome. :) Now the first thing I find throghout the poem is that you force your rhymes to ...

I agree with the person saying it switched between child and lover... It's a little ambiguous... Leading to it being... More than slightly creepy in some aspects. Now you overdid ...

Have you happen to have read the 'Merchant of Venice' recently? Or at least I believe that's the one...? Pound of flesh is a typical punishment, it just happens to ...

Awww. It made my spine tingle. It's very sad, and heartfelt. 'I lost my angel not so long ago' that is such a... heart-wrenching line. It's beautiful, and my favourite ...

Nice job. Serious, but not overly bitter, nor overly lyrical. It will destroy us, Until the world is empty. Now this line I wasn't so sure about, it kinda jarrs. ...

...Win. ... *Tries to find some fault to help with* ... ... No. ... I loved it, heh. I love how he's all confused and doped up, though the short ...

Hee, I love the theme. A little more to say about this one, it goes a bit... well i kept tripping over it. 'Woven together in movement's trance.' I don't ...

Right. My forte lies in poetic analysis, not prose, so I hope you don't mind that I stick to reviewing your poems for now? Actually. *Reads* I really like that! ...

Hmm. Not bad I guess. One thing: your erm, title. Reminds me of a Haddaway song. Which is now in my head. Badly. Reeeeeeeegardless, allow me to get the nit-pick-o-matic ...

Don't do the x2 thing just type it out twice. : D Your other one's better. *Fidgets* Down to business. (I saw this on the list so I had a ...