Satira

this is very long. and it's all the same, really. it sounds like you have a whole lot of experience with this. The girl doesn't really have a personality except ...

Hi! I haven't read the rest of this story so i can't say anything about plot, really. But i saw that you had 0 reviews so i wanted to do ...

I liked this, but there are a lot of cliches. like 'lovingly'. you do not need 'lovingly.' this is a love poem. we know it's lovingly. other cliches: crystal clear ...

wow. I loved this. I really did. It's hard to explain why though. (*facepalm*...i'm supposed to be REVIEWING it) i'm just going to nitpick for now. 'creating swirls' is a ...

god, i LOVE warriors. haven't read it in a while, but i see and like where your inspiration came from. you give the characters, their appearances, and their jobs, but ...

I like this story, so i'm going to be super nitpicky and irritating. Humor me, please. after 'street', consider making a new paragraph before 'Just'. It gives a nice moment ...

since I've seen SAO, i'm a little confused. I have no indication that this is the world of SAO. It just sounds like kids meeting in the real world. or ...

hi! here's what i will say the tense sounds forced. I know present tense is annoying, but using past tense for this story doesn't sound quite right to me. when ...

Contrary to the last comment, i did not like the beginning. The 'I forgot to introduce myself', has been overused and wrongly so, because it sounds corny, and like the ...

Hi! I'm going to like, jump into it. I like the concept of this story, but there are a few things that are a little confusing and have to do ...

Hi! so, this is what i would say. The starting line sounds a little rushed. actually, i don't even think it's really needed, at all. the second line is really ...

hm... i like that you're writing a horror story, because i haven't seen that in a while. unfortunately, all scary stories do virtually nothing to me in terms of fear9even ...

this is what i'm going to say: a lot of these ideas have to be more specific. i know that when you're filming, you have to do it in a ...

I think this is...exactly like the warriors. Except for the planned murder. your main character is a murderer. And i don't think she cares. Which is going to make her ...

well, i like the format... it's interesting. this is what i have to say. people don't write in their journals like that. The thing is, they write in their journals ...