Sassykat

"In this insecurity we turn our pacing circles, that is born in the dim lights of our minds when we lavish our thoughts thoughtlessly." In these first lines, I noticed ...

I first have to say that the transition from the first and second lines was really messy and confusing. Was the Word clothed in royalty? The same thing goes for ...

This was such a cute, refreshing poem! I liked it a lot. It does have it's mistakes, though. For one: Eating and making wormholes This makes it sound like Mr. ...

"In a world filled with angry people" this line seemed just a little bit awkward and long. "I lost my breath." This line was also a little odd-sounding. "And how ...

Sadness utterly my own Only I understand it But it’s possible even I don’t understand it Sadness without a name Alone in its shadowed mystery A Great Wall of misery ...

This isn't the first time I have seen this, but I noticed that your title is not very similar to your poem. It's not as bad as some, but It ...

Okay, I thought this was extremely cute. I really liked it. Some of it didn't make a lot of sense, however, like when he finally came from under the bed, ...

I noticed a lot of punctuation errors, but that is it technically. I also noticed that the title had nothing to do with the poem. I liked it a lot, ...

Okay, I like it, but it is in need of some improvement. The first line, the "No longer!" didn't seem to fit in with the quotations. It was just a ...

You know, I didn't particularly like this, but It's an opinionated thing. I am just really religious and don't agree with your last line. I have to wonder, is this ...

Purse your lips against old rolled mary-jane made only--I believe this is supposed to be Mary-Janes, capitalized and plural. from the best imported Columbian black, While you settle back into ...

"Pride, that keeps me going From falling off the ground Whenever I keep on flying---this little bit to the end of the stanza is a little bit awkward. It doesn't ...

You know, to be honest, I found this one to be a repetition of some other songs I have heard. I also found it to be a little awkward, I ...

Just so you know, it took your explanation for me to make any kind of sense of this song. If you don't use line breaks, you might at least add ...

This isn't supposed to have punctuation, right? I did notice a couple of other things, though, it's that i don't want to remember I knew i was different and so ...