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Merry Christmas! in the seventh year

by Kimberlykat


In the beginning was the Word
clothed in royalty created the world
Ancient of Days, given for our sake
takes
all our stains of sin away

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Tue Jul 27, 2010 1:12 pm
Sassykat wrote a review...



I first have to say that the transition from the first and second lines was really messy and confusing. Was the Word clothed in royalty?
The same thing goes for the second to the third. Confusing.
I like it, it has an interesting feel to it, but I would like to understand it more.





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