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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Mystery / Suspense Re: L'autre Endroit

    Hello, Random! I'm here to review your work ^^ I liked this! The reveal that Ade killed someone caught me by complete surprise. I was not expecting this story to ...

    Jul 10, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Humor Re: Electric Green- 1

    Heya, crobbins! I'm here to review your work today ^^ First of all, welcome to YWS! I hope you come to find a home here ^^ Now, let's get started. ...

    Jul 10, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Narrative Re: Chapter 1 of 'Jadeland'

    Hello there. I see you've already gotten some nitpicks, so this review will be mainly my reader's opinion. Let's get started then ^^ Mainly, I think that you spent way ...

    Jul 8, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor Re: Contest Entry: The Chosen Grandma (first 1000 words, revised)

    Hiya, Blue! I figured I'd start at the revision, so let's jump in. You did a good job with that opening line. I like that I'm plunged right into the ...

    Jul 6, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Prologue

    Hiya, Arianna! Just from first glances, I can see that you're in dire need of some paragraphs, girl. It's customary to break a piece of text whenever you're introducing a ...

    Jul 6, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Humor, Satire Re: Frost Lark News 7/2/17

    Hiya, Sheyren! Have some opinions ^^ First of all, I LOVE WtNV. Love it! And I think you've adopted the radio style really nicely here. It's obvious you have a ...

    Jul 5, 2017
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Humor Re: "Knife fight with Mark: Free"

    Hiya! First off, just a little code help. If you use [img]link[/img] this format, then your pictures will ahow up automatically in your document. Like this Just make sure the ...

    Jul 4, 2017
  • Poetry » Satire, Humor Re: Dumb

    Hello, Thisislegacy! Name's Reise and I'm here to review your goodies ^^ Now, first of all, I may have a bias towards haiku's but I loved this. There is something ...

    May 21, 2017
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Other Re: Saved

    Hello, TheChristianWriter! My name is Reise and I'm here to review your goods ^^ First, this is a nice, simple poem with a good a consistent rhythm. However, it feels ...

    May 21, 2017
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Spiritual Re: Moonlight Mirage

    Hello, nimy, and welcome! First off, I absolutely loved this. You have a fine way with words, especially in that old Shakespearean type voice. Congratulations on managing to use "thee" ...

    Apr 9, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: chaos theory: a crash course my relationships

    This reminds me of so many car conversations with my ex. I really love the voice in this one and the way it swerves with the format of the poem. ...

    Jul 29, 2016
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Literature Re: non

    Hello, Gema, Reese here with a review! Wow. Just wow. That was an amazing ride to go on. The opening scene was slow, but you write in a way that's ...

    Jan 23, 2016
  • Short Story » Realistic, Other Re: Carry on my wayward son

    Hello, Juni. Reise here with a review for you! ^^ Let's get right into to it then! Your tense changes randomly throughout your story. I just suggest you go through ...

    Jan 23, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: the cosmos

    Hello, Monsters. I always hate commenting on technicalities or grammatical things when reviewing or discussing poetry - artistic liberty and whatnot - but I can't help but assume you mean ...

    Jan 20, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Firegirl (1)

    Okay first before getting into other things, I want to get out of the way some of the more technical stuff I noticed about your piece. So lets get started ...

    Jan 20, 2016


I cannot separate the aesthetic pleasure of seeing a butterfly and the scientific pleasure of knowing what it is.
— Vladmir Nabokov