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Re: Time and Graffiti
There's something very beautiful about this. There are parts that feel not quite right but there's a certain disconnected flow that has a raw power to it. In essence, I ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: Never was (Wish Upon a Star--Poetry series)
Hi, you need a review and I need some points because my team are losing. Let's see if we can help each other out, huh? Concept First off, I like ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: lost
Alright I think I'm taking a break after this but here I am to give your poor, neglected poem a review! Title: This is something you need to think about ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: His Juliet
Hi, looks like you could use a review! ARIAM [color=blue]
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: Rushing
Hi! So it's review day which means I'm searching through those pieces that don't have many reviews and I came across yours. Long story short, I'm gonna review this :) ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: Provision
Poetry, poetry! I'm amazed you haven't had any reviews on this, normally people snap up the shorter pieces! But anyway, here I am to correct that :) The home is ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: A wild sheep chase
Hi, here to review! Specifics 1. Let’s begin this brief review with a quote issued by Jay McInerney: ‘a remarkable writer...He captures the common ache of the contemporary heart and ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: The New Job
Hi, looks like you could use a review! On a side note, I love the little introduction you've used at the top, it's nice to be able to see at ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: Emery Adventures - The Picnic
Oh a script, I think its been a little while since I reviewed a script, what fun! Specifics 1. My first comment is for your TV man. I felt that ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: Pathway chapter 5
Hi! Here I am to review, you're my first review of the day actually but I saw you on the 0 reviews list and felt sad for you so here ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: The Mechanic
Hi, sorry about the delay on this! But now I'm here so let's take a look :) Title: It's a strong, straight-forward title so you get a thumbs up from ...
Jun 20, 2012 -
Re: The Experiment (part one)
Haiiii! Okay so my first comment is that you need to fix the bold on the first section. It shouldn't be hard to do, just go on edit work and ...
Jun 18, 2012 -
Re: Alone
You said with urgency so I guess I'll do this now ^^ Title: I don't like it. It's dull, obvious. Doesn't leave much to the imagination or trigger any thoughts, ...
Jun 18, 2012 -
Re: deleted
Hi! I seem to be lurking in the lyrics section a little at the moment and thought I'd check this out ^^ Repetition I think there was too much of ...
Jun 17, 2012 -
Re: Broccoli
Hello and welcome to YWS! This is a cute and funny poem, nice work, though I do have a few tips on what you might do to make it even ...
Jun 16, 2012
