Rydia

“I did it all for you, to slip past Death the Lie I sung it all for you, to watch the stone tears cry I lived it all for you, ...

I think this poem would work really well if you improved the rhythm of it because the flow seems to pause in places. A few suggestions... I am a different ...

The structure of this piece was very imaginative and I like the connections to music throughout your writing. I'm very tempted to place a comma after fluent though. Not only ...

He pulled his shirt - Here I think you mean he pulled off his shirt. Other than that, it was nice, it was romantic, it was a little unoriginal and ...

I quite liked this but I have to admit that you have some rather extreme characters. Inconsiderate boyfriend. Inconsiderate parents. Inconsiderate persona. Maybe tone down the teen drama a little ...

A few specific points first - As the black specks grew larger began to hurry away from the area They fell straight and hard towards the Earth Their wings, however, ...

A few specific points first - Meg didn’t realize it's importance, but not too long after discussion on Act II as it related to the history and culture of Shakespeare’s ...

I like this, just a few pointers... turn to darkness.I try and understand [A space between the full stop and I] I will be waiting with friends by my side. ...

Withdraw rather than withdrawl the hard times that I had to go through this change. that I had to go through to reach this change or that I had to ...

I shall answer that Alice. One of the main characters in charmed is called Paige Mathews but I guess it was just a huge coincidence. Personally I prefer Prue anyway ...

Okay, I liked this and first I have one specific comment to make before I get onto the general stuff - The red carpet was not straight and we were ...

Not going to mention the repetition seen as others dealt with that... oh dear. Too late. I mentioned it. Seriously though, that doesn't work. One or two lines repeated for ...

I found this quite interesting but perhaps a few flashbacks of the relationship would have helped. It's hard to feel pain for someone else if the reader can't experience that ...

First, this needs to be longer but then I don't think you're being serious... Oh, i have a froggy his name is soggy he is an ugly froggy just like ...

I suppose I shall have to add it to my reading list. Hmmm. That makes 78 authors and 143 books that I should read during my life. Lol. Don't ask. ...