Rydia

Hmm. I think the opening is rather strange and to be honest it's a little unecessary. I mean, smaller and stranger creatures than faeries swim in the sea in real ...

In general, this was a touch cliche with the setting of the bar, the dark, mysterious man whos drink gets spilt and the horrid, scary vampires disturbing the peace but ...

An interesting story, my friend. You have some great action here, some lovely descriptions and generally a well paced, well written, enjoyable piece of writing. Perhaps just a touch too ...

I think that this was very well written. Your characters are brilliant and some of your dialogue is beautiful. You have a good variety of setences, some lovely description and ...

This is a strange little poem to be honest. I think it has the potential to be a light, enjoyable, perhaps even amusing poem but at the moment it's more ...

Again, you need to expand on your description but the meetings between the kitten and the car and the kitten and the people were good. You have some nice dialogue ...

Writing from the point of view of a cat is interesting and the idea intrigues me but I think this could have been better. Consider the five senses when you're ...

First off, either you or some helpful mod needs to add a rating to this. Then, you need to fix your grammar before the rest of the poem can be ...

Hmm. I think that the basic plot, well the basic question rather is a good place to start but the punctuation needs some work and it's a touch abrupt. I ...

Hey there Clau! I love the imagery behind 'crinkled pages,' there's so much that can be deciphered from just those two words. The rest of the first line is good ...

I like the plot you have here but I think some of the dialogue needs a little more work and you should have probably gone through and checked for mistakes. ...

Hello there! Just thought I'd let you know that we like new members to critique two pieces of work before they post their own but no worries, just do so ...

There was lots of action and tension in this section which is great and I'm actually starting to feel a little sorry for Khor though, to be honest, I wouldn't ...

Hmmm. I think Khor creates a few too many items for the cell. If each spell hurts him, wouldn't it be wiser to just provide himself with the basics or ...

Hmmm. I have to agree that the coughing up blood was over used but other than that, the plot was reasonable and I like Knall's new wings. That part was ...