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Re: The Moon or Whatever
Hi! Happy Review day! Wow, this poem is really beautiful. It's a little sad and the imagery is amazing. I really can't find anything you should change. I really love ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Shifties: Chapter 2 - Nightmare
Hi there! Happy review day! I really liked this, I think I liked it even more than the first chapter. I especially enjoyed the dream sequence, it's very well written. ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Shifties: Chapter 1 - Lost
Hi there, and happy review day! I really liked this story! It's very well written. It's a bit confusing at times given the fact that the reader doesn't know exactly ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: ily
Hi, and happy review day! I really liked this, especially the twist at the end. It was a really good and original idea. I wasn't quite sure about your rhyme ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Guess What!
Hi there, and happy review day! First off, I enjoyed this poem. It was dark and realistic. The rhyming did get to be a bit much at times, however. None ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Looking through the surreal glass
Hi there, and happy review day! First let me say that I really enjoyed this poem. It was a tad confusing at points, but I think it was meant to ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Why?
Wow, this is really powerful. I've been in a situation like this twice once was almost exactly like what this poem describes. You really capture the feelings of guilt for ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: ma foraree
Well... I'm not quite sure what to think of this. Perhaps you meant to make a point with your spelling, but if so it was lost on me. I've looked ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Finding Perseverance
When I read the first line of this I really didn't know what to think, but I kept going and I'm glad I did. This is a very interesting and ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Autumn Villanelle
I love the flow and repetition of this poem. It's really beautiful. I like how you almost made the seasons into people. I love the line "Alongside weary branches shaking ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Pineal Gland - Chapter 1&2 - Metaphysical twist on the Zombies Craze - Horror/Dark Comedy/Twisted/Philosophical
I actually liked this a lot. It's definitely a different take on zombies. I love your use of sarcasm and comparisons. Here are a few changes I would suggest: "Now, ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Making a wish on passing cars.
I really liked this! It's simple, beautiful, and relatable. It has a nice flow and beautiful wording. I couldn't really find much wrong with this. If I'm going to nitpick, ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Last Werewolf Chapter 1
Overall, I thought this was a pretty good story. I'm interested to see where this is going, and curious about Luke. There were, however some errors. Mostly they were grammatical ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Kwikw Dancer
What a lovely little story! This gives a lot of insight into a culture that I am unfamiliar with but you made everything very clear, even for a complete outsider. ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: To Marta
Really well done! I barely noticed the lack of e's. This was a hard challenge and you managed to pull it off really nicely. I love some of the synonyms ...
Feb 23, 2014
