RoxanneR

Fantasy Of You, all I want to do is see how much I have improved writing, from three years ago untill now. And I don't waste people's time, as I ...

Yes, it's a bit confusing, but with a little bit of editing and some re-aranging, it could be really good! RR*

There is hardly anything there to base any constructive criticism on, but if you add more to the plot and characters, you could get a lot more help. RR*

It's good, but there's not much to go on. You can get a real picture of where the character is and everything around them. Is it the beginning of a ...

This is a bit heavy going, as there are no double-spaced paragraphs, so it just looks like one big blob of words. Try editing it a bit. RR*

Some of the description is good, but some more would be good. RR*

That was very funny! Just like me when I got my first detention! RR*

Very, VERY odd! But funny, and the YouTube was a bit of light relief from my homework. Thanks! RR*

I like all the description that you put in this poem, but I feel like Jack too. It's wierd! Does any more of your own writing make you feel like ...

Yeh, you definitly need to add more for people to give you more constructive criticism. But it sounds good for a begining. RR*

The woman's character and the other main boy (who hasn't yet been introduced) are both based on us, but it has been hard to add more charactoristics so that they ...

It's ok, but I agree with Snoink. Capitallizing every word is annoying, but if it is essential in a poem, don't listen to our comments. RR*

This is good, with some developed characters and scenes, but the frammar needs working on a bit. Also, do you need all that text in one big paragraph, or can ...

I have never written a story with an animal as the main character. Could you all guess what the animal was alright? If you need an answer, PM me. RR*

You could try double-spacing your paragraphs to make it a bit more readable, but apart from that the storyline was good. RR*