RoseTulipLily

I am no expert on poetry, but I couldn't not review this. You had me hooked right away from the very first word. This poem really tugged at my heartstrings ...

Clearly, I'm joining the party very late regarding this story, but I still wanted to review this. Wow. I was instantly hooked from the first few sentences. From the way ...

Aside from some mistakes that have already been pointed out by others such as "there" where there should be "their", I enjoyed this very brief story. Much like two sentence ...

My main critic would be that you make sure to to do proper spacing. For example: "The group chattered amongst themselves, but the young lady bolted, so swiftly as if ...

'That day that you stopped breathing, I’ll never forget it.' Isn't horrible, but I think it might be smoother to say,'I'll never forget the day you stopped breathing.' 'A few ...

'He could smell the food cooking from downstairs quite well.' I would suggest deleting 'quite well' I would also suggest putting an exclamation make rather than a coma before a ...

It might have been smoother to say 'Ross's breaths were shallows' rather than that he was breathing dry shallowly. I also suggest "Shaking" be replaced by "shakily". "He'd always had ...

This send chills down my spine, especially at the end. I must say, however, that it could have been more interesting if you explored Susie's feelings more as she was ...

You made some mistakes when punctauating dialogue. For example, it should be “I need you to tell me your name," The woman whispered The same applies for what should be ...

"The invaders are closing in day by day and there is not much that we can do about it," said granpa Cho in his old, weak voice, but it looked ...

“A1!” Ian called, as he stepped into the room. “Ah, Ian.” A1 stood up and shook Ian’s hand. “Of course,” A1 said, reaching into the box. “Please sit, Dr. Joyce,” ...

Okay, I'll just come out and admit it. This made me cry whilst I read it. It was very poignant in my opinion. No doubt about that whatsoever. I could ...

The errors have already been pointed out, so I won't discuss them. Ignoring said errors, I enjoyed this little poem. For the most, I think you correctly described most children ...

"Katerina Michkov was a lot of things; a thief, a wanted criminal, and a murderer. She’d committed more than her share of killings over the years. But one thing the ...

Simple and short, but sweet. In a few words, you manage to show an interesting relationship betweeen these two characters and although I haven't personally experienced anything like this, I ...