RoseTulipLily

Greetings! Let's get the criticism out of the way first, yes? "colours that bled through the pages onto the other side and swirled together to create an affect that was ...

Greetings! First off, welcome to the site. I am fairly new here myself and a few years older than you, so I understand your feelings a bit. Everyone's work is ...

Yay! Another chapter. Okay. Review time *rubs hands together* Criticism first: "I fire another round from my pistols into the mass of ungodly black demons at the end of the ...

Greetings! I am uncertain if I can offer anything new in terms of feedback that anytime else has not already said, but I'll try. 'Townsfolk gathered on the street with ...

Greetings! Let's get the criticism out of the way first. Criticism: "You're suicidal?" She asked, as if she didn't already figure it out. She didn't. She hadn't figured out a ...

Greetings! First off, this was a very well-written and interesting story whose title caught my attention immediately. Your descriptions were quite impressive although I must say that I think the ...

Greetings again! So criticism wise, I really don't think there's much I can say that hasn't already been said by other people in their reviews, but hey maybe I can. ...

Greetings! Let's get started with the review. Criticism first: 'Everyone thought the media was making up ridiculous stories to attract viewers.' In this sentence, the word "ridiculous" seems unnecessa

Greetings! I must say this was a very fascinating beginning. Your descriptions were well done and caught my interest very quickly. I do have some critiques, though, so let's get ...

Greetings! Your summary alone caught my attention and so here I am. Let's start the review now! :) "and forced himself to not close his eyes and look away." For ...

Hello! I must say this was very beautifully written. The descriptions and imagery were wonderful You clearly know what you're doing. I do still have some critics though. 'The hardened ...

Greetings! Your story piqued my curiosity and so here I am. Let's get started with the review then, yes? A short chapter, but it is just the beginning and sometimes ...

'Mom had the worried look that she always gives whenever Lexi had her knife.' This sentence seems a but awkward. Maybe you could replace it with 'Mom wore the same ...

Greetings! I must say this was must an interesting start. You manage to set up the beginning of the story quite well. Though it would have been nice to show ...

'He was still drained of magic, but had been too afraid to stop and rest, wanting to get as far away from Dunswallow as he possibly could.' There's nothing wrong ...