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I don't know if you meant "stopped" to be pronounced "stop-ed," but if you didn't, the second line is only 6 syllables when it should be 7. I liked this ...

I really liked the interactions in this. They were satisfying but also somewhat realistic. This is probably the best dragon piece I've read here. I also like your descriptions. I ...

XD no pressure! Get your stuff done first!

ah. :)

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I was inspired to write this poem after scraping my hand (softly) on the brick wall of my chapel. If one was to do that hard enough, you could definitely ...

Curious...

Very helpful and funny. Great job, and great subject matter. I like the part with the monsters hidden in the corners. ^^

Hey, I think anywhere in the torso area is a good contender for death.

oh this line. "The source of blood is coming from your chest, but near your upper right shoulder. You are groaning." It still sounds like he's a goner. I mean, ...

Ooooh okay. ^^ Whatever you want to do. You are the all-powerful writer who molds worlds after his fancy. I think maybe clarifying the fact that the other guard isn't ...

Oh I also wanted to comment that you rhythm was very jump-rope song-y which is awesome for a child's perspective. I also think you need a better title. Think of ...

O_O where did that stanza go? I swear I had six. And (I was doing this for class) my teacher pretty much said "screw the set pattern, as long as ...

This turned out nicely. :)

Thanks for this excellent review! And yes it helps. ^^