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I see what you were trying to accomplish now. However, the subject that you are referring to as being consumed is the ink. I think you definitely need to specify ...

I find that poems that lean toward prosaic tend to get their images across more clearly than those that use superfluous, florid language. I find I enjoy reading them more, ...

Wow this was a pretty amazing review too! You caught all the parts that I stuck in there being like, "maybe no one will notice...?" This poem originally started out ...

hmm... it still sounds like the narrator has exceptional eyesight to see little garden lights all the way across the field. I figured there was something like an ambulance trip. ...

hehe all the lines rhyme with um... that one kind of rhyme. yeah. That's why there are lines in this that aren't very strong. I'm being a hypocrite and letting ...

flies have an exoskeleton which protects their soft innards from burning with heat c: Thanks for the review, timmy~ I agree. And the thing was, Miller was gonna be a ...

First and most importantly, It was not Joyce in the first chapter. Creed hasn't met Joyce yet. It was just some woman. Remember, the woman threw away the apple core, ...

I like this a lot. One little tiny thing: "Burning read bumpers" was that supposed to be red? Or am I reading it wrong somehow?

Wow, I almost missed this review. I decided today that I had time to work on another chapter of this, and I reread it to remember what happened, and then ...

Yeah, it's kind of a short story, but it's in WotP's appendix, and yes, that's to extend my time in the LMS contest. xD I'm going to be writing these ...

I am always literally talking about plumbing. This whole book is a metaphor for a toilet, donchaknow?

I guiltily admit that I wanted this epilogue to be around half its length, but word count for LMS. It'll be a lot better in the future.

You could pretend that shep is like 22 and the enchantress is like 27 and it would all be fine, eh? And timmy. Why would you not want to stay ...

What you already read was actually the epilogue XD This here is both the prologue and chapter one, and the prologue isn't current events, it actually happens a few years ...