Ringo_rules987

The use of onomatopoeia in this piece was nice. It helped bring out the drama and made it interesting to read. As the other posters have said, your Alice in ...

I actually really enjoyed reading that. Your rhymes were subtle and helped pull the poem together in a way instead of hindering the message of the poem. Going along the ...

I can't really agree with Love2act4ever... My qualm lied in the rhymes. Your rhythm was fairly consistent with a hiccup here and there. You see, your rhyme scheme lacked complete ...

Conceptually I applaud you. It's unique, organic, and refreshing to read something a bit more original. They way you constructed it I wasn't a fan of. It felt as if ...

It's nice, but you really had some rhythm problems in there. The rhythm of the first stanza doesn't fit the second, particularly in the first and last lines. When reading ...

It's a beautiful love poem, but some of the rhymes weren't necessarily "true" rhymes. In the second and sixth stanzas, the words don't rhyme completely. Family, dearly? No. Again, mend? ...

Finally a consistent rhyme scheme! ^_^ Anyway, I enjoyed reading this. I enjoyed it very much. As I said in the above statement, your rhyme scheme was consistent all the ...

I didn't particularly care for it. It just seems so unrefined to me. I found myself reading it quickly, like each line had little meaning. There were too many questions ...

Look over for spelling error(s), first off. It's a pretty poem, and I enjoyed reading it. It's more of a "feel good", "warm your heart" thing. You know? =3 If ...

It's a nice poem, but it doesn't make too much of an impact. You need to clean up your grammar as the other posters have said. It flows well, though, ...

I enjoyed reading this very much. I particularly enjoyed reading the line "God is angry, God is a fingernail". It's all very surreal, contemplative, and it flows together very nicely. ...

Urgh.. I don't know what I can add without simply repeating what the other posters here have already said. Anyway, it's a nice poem. Nice... just nice. I agree with ...

You have a good topic, but the rhyme scheme is so inconsistent... If you're going to rhyme, make a pattern. >_< I don't really feel that it's specific enough either, ...

The words you chose were very exquisite and rich, and the rhyming was well done as well. The rhyme scheme you chose was reminiscent of an Italian sonnet. A,B,B,A. (Abba, ...