Ringo_rules987

Conceptually the poem is great, but you had a few things in there that threw me off a bit. The first stanza was fantastic, the rhyme weaved in nicely without ...

I don't call this a poem, and by no means am I saying it's not a poem because it is short. Emily Dickinson's "Fame is a Bee" was four lines ...

I really enjoyed reading this, the imagery is nice and to me its a very refreshing love poem. I particularly loved this line: Not an assemblage or words on a ...

This, to me, is a brilliant representation of the disappoints of failure and life in general. This is a topic that really can appeal to many people, so conceptually I ...

Okay let's do this: Most of us that live in the moment are lost, and it seems the only way to find yourself it to end it all, for nobody ...

You know I don't know if I can call this poetry, it literally reminded me of a prerequisite list for some sort of job. I like the concept, but immediately ...

I really do think this has potential to be a really great poem. I truly believe that. I really enjoy the concept but the message of this poem could have ...

Overall I thought you did an "okay" job, but the rhyming was sporadic and all over the place. It lacked consistency. Probably cause, it misses you This was one main ...

I'll break this down one stanza at a time. Martha, I’m coming. It won’t be long. Just hold on tight and help me along. The rhyme here is awkward because ...

I watched you go like that, And I couldn’t believe it. I thought you were strong. But I guess I was wrong. Awkward Rhyme You were the one who cheered ...

I really liked all the imagery in this, it allowed me to paint a picture in my head, but there were some parts that didn't make sense to me. I ...

I can't call this serious poetry, like all the other posters have said. See, when you kill us with repetition in list form it just gets monotonous. I can obviously ...

I didn't get anything out of this. The questions made it so monotonous and so tedious to read I had difficulty getting through the poem. Conceptually and emotionally I liked ...

I think a little more length would help its overall effect, but what you had there was absolutely beautiful. It was exquisite, and grammatical error(s) have been pointed out, so ...

Rhymes got a bit forced in parts but rhythmically it was spot on. But I'll get away from the technical aspects. Emotionally it's like a knife, it cuts deep. The ...