Rigel

I don't think that you needed the bit in italics, the "why did my parents leave me here like this." It was telling, not showing, and redundant. Otherwise I liked ...

I am a bit neurotic about rhyming, and I would just like to let you know that most of this doesn't rhyme. Some of it rhymes, but you have no ...

Step one: change the title. I hate the title to death. I started to read this, expecting to laugh at a piece of pointless emo swill, when in reality it ...

In-depth review time. Darkness is not the most original subject, but it's doable. Not saying you aren't inspired, just saying that a lot of other people have had your idea. ...

This is terrific. You had an irregular rhyme scheme, which is my own personal style, but then you made it very regimented (pun intended) towards the end. It was a ...

Well isn't emo about letting your own feelings of sadness out for the world to see? If people think that emo people are odd, why should they bottle those feelings ...

HAHAHAHAHA. I loved it. You kind of kill the name joke at the beginning though. You could cut out a lot of that and it would be funnier. For example: ...

I liked this a lot. The repetition was necessary in order to show how crushing it was to have mom not show up over and over and over again. I ...

I like the poem. What kind of poem is it? A free verse? How do you not know that it's free verse? Can you read? Besides that, I enjoyed it. ...

To me, it felt too raw. It wasn't poetic enough. It was powerful emotion, but it needed some seasoning, a sprig of rosemary, some chicken broth and a splash of ...

Crammed was the only word I could think that would fit and rhyme. Well it doesn't work, and it ruins the last stanza of an otherwise lovely poem. Nobody says ...

Ahhh, that was lovely. I'm usually super-technical about rhyming poems and super-cynical about free verse, but good free verse melts me. The beginning lasted a bit too long for my ...

oh why do they push me to the brink of life. already my time's elapsed and now i live with all this strife. i've gotta stay and waste away the ...

Ok, good effort. I love odd rhyme schemes. There were a few problems with this, however; the most prominent was that in many places you sacrificed meaning for a rhyme ...

This is bad English. I'm not talking about the poem yet, you understand. I'm talking about your use of the English language. The light pitter-patter, Of the rain drumming on ...