Riedawriter23

CHAPTER 1 It had all begun that summer. Looking back now, I realize how young and naive I was, but how was I supposed to know what was to become ...

You accidently posted two of these, both containing the exact same thing, so I deleted the other one. I'll send it to you just in case it was important. Things ...

I can't really tell what this is about. It just focuses so much on the movements and positions of your characters that it doesn't really tell a story and I ...

First of all, great idea in getting all of your information down first. I like the different species that you used and how you described each one. My favorite were ...

I like how this starts off. All action. I liked the third one the best. It reminded me of Ch. the most for some reason. I can already tell this ...

Nick's life is...terrible XD. I don't think I've read about a life so terrible, but when you think about it, it's pretty reaslitic. I liked this one. His parents are ...

The Basement was a large, large cavern, just waiting to swallow him in its murky depths. It was here that horrible monsters lurked behind every shadow, and witches cast their ...

I'd read this much earlier but didn't get a chance to review it. I loved this one, I think this is my favorite so far. Especially the conversation about Nick's ...

Still funny. Lol, though it is getting serious in some parts, such as the relationship forming between Dylan and Nick but otherwise, it's pretty funny. Very well written though. The ...

XD I thought this was awesome. Throughout this whole thing, I felt really sorry for Nick. Sheesh, his family is so...disfunctional! I didn't really expect that, which made this new ...

I do like this, because of the concept mostly. But it seemed really jumpy and I didn't get a whole lot of feeling from it because you didn't take time ...

I like the...feeling behind this poem, but the way it was presented did make me feel anything towards the narrator or the situation. Work on broadening your vocabulary in this ...

As I sit and think about my life, I think about how many lives I’ve ruined, how I filled them with pure strife, and don’t know why they didn’t make ...

Written in twenty minutes for that contest of Ryan's... Darren gazed across the park from his place in the shadows, watching his target shoot hoops with his friends. **Target? He's...stalking ...

The homuculus smiled as it drew in power. Now the mortals would see! It grinned, its little heart racing. **I think you need to make the beginning sentence a littl ...