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Re: Vulnerable
Again, I should have already reviewed this work. 'Exposing myself to a large extent Baring all emotion and feeling to you Never used to think I was into romance That ...
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Re: "I Can Taste You"/Vanilla
I should have reviewed this before since I know so much about it. Ok... here we go. ;) 'Eyes locked on A growing tension The sort of tension That existed ...
Dec 26, 2013 -
Re: Confession #14
Oooh, when my eyes hit this piece and started reading, it did feel like a personal attack. Which for achieving the effect of this piece, is gooooood. 'To be honest ...
Dec 26, 2013 -
Re: Why Are You So Drunk?
'Why are you so drunk?' Good question. :) 'Intoxicated by love.' Sounds a little bit cliché, but we'll go with it. 'In a severe way.' I am beginning to realise ...
Dec 26, 2013 -
Re: The Last Cigarette
This piece is very ironic. The idea that the character is going to smoke himself to death in the same way Rosa did is something that I think strikes a ...
Dec 26, 2013 -
Re: Anastasia Loves You
Mental illness overtones always work. And this piece is fantastic. 'remind me that I’m art.' Great line. The whole thing is one great big line. I cannot fault this piece: ...
Dec 26, 2013 -
Re: Forgotten Things Wash Up Here (Gorillaz Plastic Beach)
YIPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPEEEEEEEEE! GORILLAZ < 3333333 Now for the review. :D I like the level of detail in your description in the opening lines. However, I feel like you repeat yourself a ...
Dec 26, 2013 -
Re: Letters Have Letters
I like random sentences. And they weren't as random as I thought they were going to be, they were actually quite organised. 'understandability' is this a word? XD I don't ...
Dec 25, 2013 -
Re: that boy
Hey! I am not sure whether or not the lack of punctuation at the beginning of each line was deliberate or not? I would assume so, because it is continuous. ...
Dec 25, 2013 -
Re: What remains for us?
This is a work full of questions. Questions I think are not really answered - until the end. But there is something kind of fitting in that, which makes sense ...
Dec 25, 2013 -
Re: Ingrained stars
I love the title of this work. And the formatting. It's really easy to read. :) Since this piece is so personal to you, I feel like I want to ...
Dec 25, 2013 -
Re: Death Won't Set You Free
This is an oddly timed piece to read for me. I promise you I won't kill myself. ;) The whole piece can be encapsulated into this single line: 'But I ...
Dec 25, 2013 -
Re: Untitled (need help with the title)
Firstly: You should definitely keep going with this work! I don't see why you would think otherwise. It's brilliant. Your writing is beautiful: 'She had to take her father's place ...
Dec 25, 2013 -
Re: Dancing Trees
Short but sweet. I would love if this work was longer, but let's analyse XD 'Solid limbs' simple, pretty much an oxymoron which works well. 'curl towards sunlight' - this ...
Dec 25, 2013 -
Re: Mineralized
I don't know where to start with this piece. The way you use language is somewhat remarkable. 'The world is a gypsum gymnasium, a bituminous lignite seam.' When you say ...
Dec 25, 2013
