Renard

Hey! XD Well I was expecting a very traditional story opening here: 'Once, everyone had a normal life...' Like the whole 'once upon a time' thing. But still cool. :D ...

Hey! XD So I was interested to read this to see how similar you would sound compared to JK Rowling's writing style. And it's pretty close actually. :) '"Yes." "You ...

Hey! XD I am noticing a theme throughout your work in that they all make me want to cry. You write about heartwarming, familiar issues that seem so true. It ...

Hey! XD I won't take another work about suicide and self harm out on you solely, but I don't understand why this: 'As I stay quiet, lifeless. My blood drips ...

Hey! XD So I can only assume that this work is written from the perspective of a corpse: 'On my bed, I lie naked, shamed and dead.' So assuming that ...

Hey! XD So there is a pretty much complete lack of punctuation in this piece, which I assume is done on purpose. :) Also, the lack of capitalization is a ...

Heyo! "Time-lines Everyone has one." Awesome opening line! It reminded me a bit of one of those documentaries that like blow your mind; and the writing in this piece was ...

Hey! First of all, I haven't seen you around much before, so hi hi hi. Second of all, great title

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hey!XD If I can be honest, I don't really understand the language used in this poem. Although the title was what originally drew me to the work, I don't understand ...

Hey! XD I like the metaphors and imagery in this work and they are very powerful. This was my favourite part: Wind, rain Snow and hail. With those on my ...

Hey! XD The introduction seems very brief, like you are telling the reader everything you've written about in one go. Lots of telling, now showing. But I guess it helped ...

'Theres no more death' - Should be there's :) Nitpick out of the way Hey! XD So this is miserable. Reading the title, I thought you were going to be ...

Hey! XD Well this was very dramatic. When I was reading the description I was thinking that this would be very heartfelt and open. And it was, you didn't disappoint. ...

Hey! XD If this is true, then I admire you're honesty. The work caught my attention because it has the same title as a My Chemical Romance song and I ...