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Re: Threadbare
Hey! So this work was very metaphorical, which made for an interesting read. To be honest, I didn't really understand what meaning there was behind the first few lines: 'the ...
Apr 4, 2014 -
Re: i-m-p-o-s-s-i-b-l-e
hey! XD So this work is a WOW work. 'we could escape into oblivion, where it's youandme perpetually. and we can run wild in the sky, reach a universe all ...
Apr 4, 2014 -
Re: The Rose
Hey! XD So this work is quite short, which is a shame, because it's good and it would have been great to see more of it. The work was entitled ...
Apr 3, 2014 -
Re: What happened to the straight?
Hey! XD I am gonna start with a question. What does 'We got all dinged' mean in this context? I don't really understand this line. However, the overall sensation of ...
Apr 3, 2014 -
Re: To dream a dream the very last time
Hey! XD Well first of all, I would hate to be the last person on Earth. LOL. XD Being permanently alone would be horrible. :) 'Dream a dream for the ...
Apr 3, 2014 -
Re: My Bully
Hey! XD So this is a very dramatic piece about a very serious issue. Judging from the way you have written about this topic, it would suggest that you have ...
Apr 3, 2014 -
Re: Set Me Free
Hey! XD I think you have a weird thing going on wit the formatting here, like the spacing betwee lines at the beginning is a bit messed up. Content wise, ...
Apr 3, 2014 -
Re: Spotlight
Hey! XD First of all, the massive paragraphs are offputting. I won't past one in because you can see when you looka at the text. I would recommend editing that ...
Apr 3, 2014 -
Re: (Need a title)
Hey! So this is a very reflective work which is great. Although I can see why you would say it needs a title, because it is rather hard to define ...
Apr 1, 2014 -
Re: Remember when.
Hey! XD I will start with a nitpick. The work is really just one big chunk. I don't know whether you did this consciously or it had something to do ...
Apr 1, 2014 -
Re: -
YOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO HUNNY I find this kinda hard to review since I went through the editing process with you. So I am only going to make positive comments here because we ...
Apr 1, 2014 -
Re: How Does if Feel to Suck?
Hey! XD This is a great rhetorical question - your title I mean. 'I'm the top dog, but you're just a pup. I'm the boss battle, you're level one.' This ...
Apr 1, 2014 -
Re: This Is War
Hey! XD The strongest two lines of this piece are the opening ones: 'A whore, you called me, A whore, I am.' I think this shows something quite deeply profound ...
Apr 1, 2014 -
Re: Two Siblings Commit Suicide
Hey! XD 'One thing they didn't know is that I pushed him off the building. I got my revenge.' So this is a very sick story. :/ As the title ...
Apr 1, 2014 -
Re: The Night The Dark Lord Fell
Hey! XD You have done it again Ms Rowling. XD LOL. Seriously though, you have completely captured the essence of her writing style. Highlights: '"Step aside." "You won't touch my ...
Apr 1, 2014