Rei

I like your writing style, but I think a much longer story full of similar entries would get boring rather fast. You need some sort of a "hook" to keep ...

This is all going to be reworked. I'm determined to make this a journal, but it's a lot harder than I thought it would be.

I think all the technical stuff I noticed has been pointed out. This piece was cute. WHat I think it needed was something more to clarify that this elephant was ...

That's good to hear. BTW, I commented on a couple of your other stories if you are interested.

You certainly do have talent, and a mind for deeply emotional pieces without being sappy. And a talent for keeping me attention, which is not easy to do on a ...

Errors are edited!

You do have a point, pickle, I should add that the long distance would cost too much, which is why she won't always be able to call. It's actually intentional ...

I really don't know what to think. Some of it is funny. Some of it makes perfect sense. Then other times it is horribly offensive, especially when you touch on ...

This was really ridiculous. With a little revising, it could be passed off as mediocre comedy, but it takes itself too seriously. It's just an omelet.

Fair enough. I just think this kind of information is more interesting if it is weaved into the story, rather than given before the story begins. But the way you've ...

As usual, your writing is very beautiful. You've got lots od very nice ideas. At the same time, it's so obscure that the meaning behind the words escape me.

Since it's only a beginning, I can't say much about it. It did catch my attention. I'll probably check it out once you've posted the whole thing.

Very elegant. It is very easy to read. The words just flow off my tougue. Great work!

Agreed. I got one of the books in the series for my boyfriend's birthday. He imediately went o buy another one and finished them both in less than two weeks.

That was . . . interesting. Really graphic details. I haven't decided if I like it or not, but it certainly is memorable.