Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
You'd have heard or will hear that Pagans are barbaric and crude, commiting acts of utter revulsion at every turn; and perhaps that they are servants of the Serpent incarnate. This is the talk of ignorance. Let me then tell you a tale, a very true one indeed, of how a certain man, I, who had heard such tales, turned to the reverence of the ancient deities and spirits that ruled our forebear's lives.
Okay...this is an interesting one. It seems the narrator here is trying to create a very specific picture there. It certainly makes things interesting in terms of what could potentially be happening in this particular situation here and it does a pretty solid job as far as getting our attention as readers is concerned, so let's see where this takes us.
I had been walking through a heath for most of the day. Now, as the darkness over it was deepening, and the chill that accompanies it was settling in, I decided to rest. As I lay there, in that place that gave heathens their names, and watched the stars that slowly, but surely, came to life on the black canvas that is the night sky, I wondered what I was doing there, of all places. It seemed as if I had been walking across that heath forever, nor could I remember anything before that. It should have troubled me, but laying there atop the soft heather and watching the candles of the firmament flickering, moved as if by some cosmic wind or breath of heavenly beings, it did not. I was at peace in the serene place, seemingly untouched by anything but myself, if not even by the forces of nature. Nothing else entered my mind, and the last thing I remembered before dozing off were the stars.
Okay...well that switches the perspective of the situation up a little. its a tiny bit sudden to go from sort of dire warnings to what seems to be more of this one person's problem but it manages to work itself out well enough for the moment, so let's see where this happens to be headed. So far it is still managing to be pretty interesting.
I awoke the next morning feeling refreshed, indeed as if I had been taking a bath in roses. Subsequently, I felt I could walk all day, and well into the night, again. But to where? My mind began filling with troubling thoughts, again. I pushed them aside. "Ignorance is bliss", it's said, and I was taking it to heart-I would let nothing ruin this relaxing, and refreshing venture, despite the fact I had no course. Or did I? I continued my trek, filling my mind with my surroundings, so as to keep it from troubling me with other thoughts. The day went by much as it had the previous: a cloudless, balmy day; myriads of purple plants swaying in the fresh breeze as I plodded on by and beside them. The only difference being that now a forest lay on the border of my sights as I stopped to rest for the evening.
Well that brings us to an interesting ending there. It sort of drifted a little far there from where it started but I do like where it ended up going. I think you did a fairly solid job of that. The ending got a tiny bit cluttered there, I feel like that last paragraph could benefit from being split into two but otherwise I think it works fairly well.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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