RedRaven

This was good. A few nitpicks though: I'm sorry dear little lamb For what you're going through For the way you're forced to cram All those devastating feelings in you ...

Hello, Sicklee! This poem was good. The flow was a bit choppy, but it was good. Suggestion: One thing I'd suggest is re-wording some things. Especially the first stanza. The ...

This was fun to read! I liked that it was upbeat and happy. I am another one of those writers who writes a lot of dark, heavy material, but your ...

This was good. I really liked it! I didn't find any spelling or grammer errors, which is always good. :D I liked your references to Pandora's box, even though I ...

I really, really liked this. I loved the stream of consciousness. It actually flowed better than if you'd chosen a few sentences and put them together in a poem. I ...

Hmm... this poem is... different. It's not my piece of cake, but I like it. I do have some nitpick's to highlight, though. The skin of my eyes divorce by ...

Okay, so... ' This was an okay poem. I found it a little bit mind-numbing, but I guess that's just me. One thing I did like though, was that it ...

Overall, this was a good poem. Like SilentRain suggested, you should seperate your poem into stanzas, because it not only makes the poem easier to read, but it gives the ...

Okay, so I liked this. I do want to read more. But, when posting, you should put it in the Novels forum; since it's chapter one of a novel. Some ...

This was an interesting little read. I'm not really into stories like this, but I liked this one. A few nit-picks: Telemarketers. Telemarketers usually work in a huge call centre, ...

Wow. This was good. I didn't see any grammer errors. I loved the way you wrote it. At first I thought it was just some kind of story, but then ...

Wow. I really liked this! I'm no expert on poetry or anything, but your poem was really good. My favourite aspect of your poem was how it was written in ...

This was a nice poem. I liked it. One thing I noticed however, was lack of structure. I noticed that it didn't flow very well, and that you were very ...

This interested me a lot. I'm looking forward to more :) Nitpick: One thing that caught my attention was how you jammed your sentences together into one long paragraph. To ...

I really liked this. I don't have anything negative to say about it. One thing I noticed though, was you could fix the pacing on your poem. It was a ...