RWMcKinleys

I loved this, you did quite an amazing job describing as others have said before me, the monster. Now, it isn't perfect, reading it, as was said before, a little ...

I believe that this is necessarily good preface, but it can be polished. Even for such a short piece that you've got here. There is a very good sense of ...

This was a very interesting start.. I could picture almost everything so beautifully painted in my mind. The smoke rising from the burning town and the forest. The snow capped ...

As side before, the prologue and the first chapter are incredibly short. But don't let that discourage you from writing more. From what I can tell from the Prologue is ...

Well this is quite short! But anyway on with my review! There should be more emotion with this, Losing a dog is tragic, your reader has to be able to ...

I like this.... It's a really good start to a story. A Paranormal Fiction kinda thing going on here if you ask me. Without the romance, or maybe that is ...

My review for you and some advice I've learned over a great deal of time. I think this has the potential to become a great story. You just need to ...

Alright time for my review, I thought it was a generally a good story. At first I was a bit confused seeing how we went from somewhere to Christmas and ...

Hi I'm here to review this well done piece of writing :) First off I think you are a wonderful writer! Well done writing this! The beginning was a little ...

I believe that this story is really thought out well. Toward the end when Hal shows up I already have the feeling that he is his Father. At first I ...