Prosithion

This poem had me searching for a warm tub and a straight-razor. It's was almost but not quite teenage emo-angst. (the first two stanza's anyway) Then after that, it got ...

Oh God! Please change the font. It's a real killer on the eyes. You are DEFINATELY not who I thought you was. Change this to were . DEFINITELY is spelled ...

well, it wasn't that bad. Like Lucy said, paragraphs would be nice. This did start off well, but I was sort of disappointed in the end. The ending felt almost ...

The repetition (especially of "yeah") made it seem more like a set of song lyrics. I agree. It seems almost like a rap song then a poem. I'd even out ...

haha Pretty funny In fact, President Bush seems pretty much like his real self ^_~ Other then a lot of double exclamation points and some grammatical errors, I thought this ...

Pavel realized he wasn’t the only man to ride this cart to death, but he felt no empathy for the ones that came before him. I would change 'this cart ...

I must say, a beautiful poem. Simple, yet moving. Exemplary. Fluent Sliding melody Bellows thought through Sweet vibration Coerced by finger, Thumb and bow. Resonate, fine 'cello, With my passion ...

If I'm correct, a haiku is... 5 syllables, then 7 syllables, then five syllables. so, just cause it has 17 syllables doesnt necessarily make it a haiku. As mentioned before, ...

Interesting poem, although, admittedly, not one of my favorites. The rhythym seemed ackward through parts of it, and the irregular stanzas made the poem look odd and unweildy. The air ...

Cannibalism. oy, you and Claudette. ^_^ Smacking lips, cracking hips Percussions from the side. Slacking grips, backing zips Let your silverware slide. I particularly liked this stanza. The rhythym an

ok, this was a bit confusing. You have it jumping from one character to the next, but good description. I felt, sort of like I was jumping into this midway ...

Good poem, but please get rid of the indents and italics. They really screwed up the flow of the poem. Interesting idea, and rather deep and insightful, if you ask ...

uh... this doesn't strike me as poetry, of any kind, sorry. but, you deserve a crit anyway. ^_^ Same bat time, same Bat channel I think that this is supposed ...

uh, alright. Interesting peice, but WOW, please put stanzas in it. It makes it very daunting to read. Literally actually and below me are my enemies This is ackward. I ...

Overall, it was a very good peice, but a) I think that SWAT would try to neutralize the guy, not kill him. But, I may be wrong. b) Their armament ...