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Re: Deadchat
Hey, Wiz! Before I begin, I apologise if this review is harsh. I honestly do see a lot of potential in this, considering you wrote this during a word war, ...
Sep 24, 2015 -
Re: where the ocean leaves the sand
Hoi, Sparky~ It is late here and I have class tomorrow, but I liked this and I thought I'd drop by for a quick review. Pls ignore typos; I'm on ...
Sep 3, 2015 -
Re: No Romance: Chapter 2
Hey, Moony~ Back for more! So, my first exclamation will probably be 'all the clichés!' It has now been affirmed that that was my first exclamation. I like what you're ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: Dagger Wars - Chapter 1
Hullo. Happy Review Day! I'll make this short. You have a list of characters. Good. You know what they look like. Also good. You have the barebones of a plot ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: Thrallmagic: Chapter 1
'Rora, hello! I'm finally here~ Happy Review Day! Let's make this a quick review, yeah? Right, so I'm really enjoying your writing so far. I'm horrible at praise, but you ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: Beastling : Chapter 2
Back for 1.2! Happy Review Day~ In the first line you have 'arms' and 'arm' in quite close vicinity to one another, which creates a teensy bit of repetition--I'd suggest ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: The Morning Song(critism of life)
Hi. Happy Review Day~ First off, you have a typo in the title. c: 'Critism' ought to be spelled 'criticism'. Secondly, I'm going to talk about capitalisation. Normally, I don't ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: No Romance: Chapter 1
Hullo, Moony! Happy Review Day~ I'll get to straight to pushing my teeth in this chapter, then. So, to be honest, while I'm really fond of the concept you've got ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: XIII
Hey, Neverland~ Pomp here for a review! Happy Review Day! Let's make this quick. The first paragraph was decent enough to draw me in; you varied sentence length and the ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: Gossamer Hearts {WIP}
Hello! Pomp here to leave a quick review~ Welcome to YWS! My first critique is going to be your handle on language. You have a masterful way of describing the ...
Aug 23, 2015 -
Re: Beastling : Chapter 1
Howdy, Auxii! Finally here to review~ Happy Review Day! (Also, I'm typing this out on a phone; pls ignore typos.) So, I'm going to reiterate what Blues said about removing ...
Aug 30, 2015 -
Re: The Faces Falling From the Ceiling
Hey, Gray~ Pomp here for a quick review! So, the first thing that needs to be tackled in this poem is flow. Like, tackle it pronto, please, because the poem ...
Aug 13, 2015 -
Re: When the Road Gives Way
Hey, Iron! Here for The Big Review. You've already gotten some very solid reviews on this piece, so the criticism I will be leaving will be mostly general~ I'll try ...
Jul 31, 2015 -
Re: Camera Obscura - 1
Hey, Anci! This is a The Big Review review~ Disclaimer: this is also a phone review; don't step on the typos. I'm going to try to keep this short. I ...
Jul 26, 2015 -
Re: The Melding - Chapter One
Hey, megsug! Pomp here for The Big Review . So, I'm going to begin with critiquing your first paragraph. I hesitate to pull chunks out, but although the first couple ...
Jul 24, 2015
