Poison

Okay, here we go. My corrections are in bold. There he was. There was Bethany's best friend--kissing Jade. This first sentence confuses me. If you switch to Chauncey's point of ...

I don't have much critique for this. It was both really good grammatically and story-wise. I found it interesting that you decided to use a blind girl. I am visually ...

Now here, He Broke That Shield Of Armor And Showed Her The World; His World. it may be grammatically correct (I'm not entirely sure), but, to me, it doesn't really ...

Sorry for the delay again! Please let me know what you think of this chapter, I really, really need some good reviews. A special thanks to all those who have ...

I feel this deserves a critique. So here we go. Sorry it can't be a line-by-line crit. But I will point out the big things. Okay, the first thing I ...

“Oh, it’s perfect!” A black, grand , piano stood in the middle of the café with white keys shining in the spotlights. “I wanted to bring you here this morning, ...

Edits are in bold. I hope the layout of this is not messed up. If it is, then please excuse it. I was'nt concentrating on grammar, just the story. Tell ...

I'm sorry I don't have time for a line-by-line critique, but I will give a few comments. First, your opening paragraph. It doesn't really hook me. Telling me what she ...

Sorry I couldn't get to this earlier, d@ydre@mer!! I promise to do better next time. (corrections are in bold) This is a story I wrote last year, to be more ...

Alright, here we go. When I was a young girl, I had dreams of romance and love. Though when i capitalize was 15 Comma. (Write out the word "fifteen" to ...

Okay, I promised a crit. So here we go. (Okay, if you read this and are totally lost, that is because you haven't reread chapters four and five. They are ...

hey guys, :) this is just a random section in a story I am TRYING (note trying) to write, I find stories really difficult, and as you'll probably notice I ...

My corrections are the bold, black words. This is going to be a little short because I don't have too much time on my hands. Note: I'm only going to ...

Okay, so this is a line-by-line critique of this story. It may get a little repetitive because of the punctuation corrections. First post!! I've done my two reviews as due, ...