Phoenixfire

Wow, it's been forever since I've reread this. Good point--and something I'll change if it ever goes any further. Thanks for the input!

The rhyming was random. I liked how it sounded. And like I said when I replied to your post on part three, this is supposed to be a darker look ...

Oh, yeah, I know 'blackness' and night are really overused. Just think of what I could've done--I was thinking of using a darkness of night/absence of light combo. Not so ...

Yeah, it does seem kind of random, but it evolved on a page somehow. I don't know. I was also sorta limited by the format I chose, but I guess ...

I mean absolutely no offense to those who commented (really, because I love comments!) but I did find it a little funny how seriously you took this blurb. You're right--I ...

There probably is a name for it, but I can't think of it. Oh, well. Yes, it was originally a series, but I didn't like it that way. Some of ...

You all are very right on the topic of meaning. Truthfully speaking, it doesn't really mean anything. And no, it wasn't meant to be a sound poem, although that would ...

Wonderful. I approve wholeheartedly and offer kudos. You took a great topic and followed it through to the end with no half-steps or faltering in between. Keep up the good ...

I like it, a lot, but I think you might have developed the dark/light contrast a bit more. Although, as it is, it's a good poem. I love the rhythm.

Very, very nice. I love the last line. Many kudos to you!

you have just made my day. I was sure that fratricide was a term for killing a sibling. I never dreamed I could be so lucky as to get a ...

When I get more inspiration on this topic, I'll write more and add to this. The lack of capitalization/punctuation was on purpose, as sort of a contribution to the middle-of-the-night ...

no, you're not missing anything. it was random. the general feeling was that of being comforted by a ghost singing in the dark, because in the middle of the night ...

I applaud your topic. good show. all kudos to you, brava, etc. etc.

*crunch crunch* spider. yum. yeah, the being eaten at the end threw me. the rhythm is a bit erratic, but I think it works.