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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Two Short Poems of Opposing veiwpoints: The Attorney

    I like the set out of this, and enjoy the idea quite a bit, your use of alternative perspecitves is cute and interesting, something I don't see often. I also ...

    Feb 23, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Esper’s Sepulchral I : Chapter 1: The Season of the Pikara

    Pikara bounced down the street of the seaside town, which lay nestled at the foot of a mountain. She was worried. If she failed the Final Trial, then it meant ...

    Feb 23, 2008
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Maria's Last Wish

    Eee, this was really good, Molly. ^^ I liked the flow and the description, it moved at a steady, appropriate pace and kept within a linear outline. I couldn't sotp ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: I Held Time in my Hand

    Hey there Adrian, I like this, quite a bit. You personified time nicely and have some beautiful imagery, it all helps your poem flow, and the reader connect. The repetition ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Prologue: Vice and Viscera

    I like this. From the first line to the last, you have a way with statements and their endings that stab at the reader not-so-gently and allow for meaning to ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Loneliness

    Hello dear! ^^ Spotted your piece and thought I'd come visit. Now, I have to say, while I understand the narrative of it, and I can see the meaning... it's ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Heroine Addict

    Cute and short, as those before me have stated. The last line did indeed make me laugh, and I think even without the explanation of the French, the idea of ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: corresponding

    As always I become stunned by you and your work. Considering the level of depth, deceptive or not, in your other poetry, this is surprisingly easy to understand. Perhaps that ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Disagreeable Persons

    Hrm, well, Zus and Miya are right in one respect. A poem should be understood, considering the context of where you're posting. That said, I think I understand this, although ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Sex Cells

    Sex Cells. It certainly does, doesn't it. You conected your title - if I'm reading it all right lol - brilliantly to the end of the poem. And the rest ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Senryu

    I like this. Short and to the point. Although is the comma in the second line necessary? I read it better without it, so I was unsure. ^^ It's got ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Lobsters are Red

    Hrm. I like this, although not so much as some of your other work. I enjoy the humour in it, and the solid description. But I think there was too ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: the romantic

    *Salutes* Still you continue to surprise me, love. This is gorgeous and cute all at once. To have so much in so little provides this little glimpse into the world, ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: A4 White

    My word. You make me yearn for such sparking shimers of eloquence, of clarity obscurity by the obviously hidden. It's brilliant, and intense, and full of meaning. I couldn't have ...

    Feb 22, 2008
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: I Can't Be Rid of You

    My dear Goddess Word, this is both funny and touching all at once. I also thing it would work really well in the way you imply in your note. Sounds ...

    Feb 22, 2008


worlds buzz over us like bees, / we be splendid in new bones.
— Lucille Clifton