Published October 1, 2007
Disagreeable Persons
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Strippers hide their souls.
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Hrm, well, Zus and Miya are right in one respect. A poem should be understood, considering the context of where you're posting.
That said, I think I understand this, although it may just be the odd way I'm reading it, and the meanings I wish to place in it. It's such an interesting piece... you manage to put a lot of pretty - and meaning - in a small haiku, which I suppose is their point xD
But yes, I like this, although understand the concerns one can have if it's not easy, or even impossible to understand. Then again, I am forever confused by your writing, it's fantastic.
*Hearts* Le Penguin.
I agree completly with Claudette here - this is extremly hard to understand without you explaining it. Fair enough it's a haiku but dosen't there still needs to be some level of understanding in it?
I'm glad to see you posting more, poetry especially since I enjoy poetry. Though, with you, everything is criptic and I can't understand it.
I feel I shouldn't, or don't have to, say this to you, but I'm almost obligated to by the poet critiquer inside me. If you have to explain the poem, it isn't a good poem. It should make sense within the confines of the poem. I think your problem is you're writing it in hopes or your audience being able to peal away each line, work, syllable, and see the hidden meaning. Keep in mind you're posting this to (no offense to anyone who reads poetry here, you are all very, very smart) people from the ages of 13-20, if not younger/older. What I mean to say it, I think you have too specific of an audience. We cannot understand this without you explaining it. I can look at it and say it is beautiful, but to me it really can't be beautiful unless I can find something in it more than it's own words.
No shorter than any other haiku.
Well i like this alot, but my gosh, it is extremly short.
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