Pawprint

That was extrememly good. I was hooked onto it for the whole way! She felt detached from her body: she felt nothing. Then slowly she slid back into her shell. ...

This was pretty good. I liked it. I especially loved how you started the chapter. It caught my attention right away. Anna would always be there for me, and I ...

Well, I think it flowed nicely. But don't listen to me...I am horrible at critiquing poems. XD You started of nicely getting right to the point that you really want ...

Surprised, Col pushed away from me , quickly standing up, two inches away from me . The repetition does not sound so good. Maybe 'two inches away' is enough. I ...

That was very moving. I loved how you chose you words. The street speaks of our grief. The trees stand stone silent in salute. Leaves lie scattered across the pavement. ...

This was incredible! I usually don't read poetry, but this caught my attehtion. I had a weird feeling when I read this. I was saying to myself this is so ...

I climbed into the passage side and she slid into the driver’s side. I think you mean the passenger side. The two warriors got into a similar looking car. Maybe ...

30 years later Maybe you should add: ... after '30 years later' to give an affect. :) “Aubrey! You have a letter,” my vampire housemate Katherine said. You should put ...

It was kind of confusing. I coudn't really follow it. It seemed to go by fast without much details. I couldn't picture the surroundings at all. With having ended the ...

This was AWESOME! (excuse my use of caps) I loved it! I was disappointed when it ended! :) But do not fear me because of what I am. I may ...

I am... what is that word ...speechless? That story drew me in right from the beginning! I was disappionted when it ended! That made Roan more nervous and scared and ...

Critiquing a poem it very hard for me because it is different from writing a fully written sentences with good grammer, punctuation and all that. WHen you write a poem, ...

This was really good! I would definately be interested in more! Gran said, the wrinkles in her face folding and unfolding with her mouth. Her white hair was tied up ...

This was really fun to read! Everyone else already pointed out all the spelling and grammer mistakes so I won't write about that. This story kind of went by fast, ...

Everyone already said everything! I really enjoyed this! I liked how you described the emotions really clearly. I actually did cry a little too :smt022 Well, i ca't wait for ...