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Re: Unbroken Part 1: Chapter Two
Hey, it's Paris here going to give you a review lets start with the good news. This has a really good plot, and the characters all seem lovable and enjoyable ...
Aug 6, 2013 -
Re: Fiasco
Firstly, I would like to say, Welcome to Story Write and hope that you are having fun reading and posting wonderful stories. Now on to the review. The story itself ...
Jul 8, 2013 -
Re: The middle of Nowhere
This has a pretty good plot and the protagonist seems decent. I like your story, but it needs some work to make it better. But don't worry nothing is ever ...
Jun 20, 2013 -
Re: Empty Love
Ok this was a good poem, but there are a few grammatical mistakes in this poem. Third line in the second stanza I think you meant 'the' instead of 'th' ...
Apr 9, 2013 -
Re: Happiness
This is really good, and I would like to say you are a really good poet, but their are a few grammatical mistakes really you just didn't capitalize the start ...
Apr 9, 2013 -
Re: Neither Awake Nor Asleep
This is really good, I love the fact that your comparing happy dreams to nightmares. You did a really good job. And what I love about your poem and comparing ...
Apr 9, 2013 -
Re: You Can
This is good, but I suggest you add punctuation marks to add more of an effect. "You can love me. Hug me, Kiss me, Hold me, Turn me into something ...
Apr 7, 2013 -
Re: Under the stars
This was pretty good. Everything rhymed and flowed smoothly. You have great imagery and I'm pretty sure anybody who reads this will be able to see the same image in ...
Apr 4, 2013 -
Re: Freedom
I have to agree with SupperMegs- you are able to catch the reader, but your not able to keep them there. At first I was able to really like this ...
Apr 4, 2013