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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: I wonder Why

    To add on to what Cario said, I think you should also Re-read your pieces before posting it, it would probably make you realize your silly mistakes. but on the ...

    Apr 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Welcome to the Dark

    I LOVE this. 'nuff said. It's dark and bautiful. This is the kind of poems I thrive to read. I think it was written very nicely and flowed very well. ...

    Apr 10, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: [Removed]

    Wow! this piece is truely creative! It's so subliminal yet meaningful. I like it. I'd give them some, but daddy would forbid it. This part really shows how you have ...

    Apr 10, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re:

    Yeah I would slightly agree with Flyer, but I would say only try to find another word for either instead or blend, because that part does rhyme. Other than that ...

    Apr 3, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Not Enough - Deleted

    Hey, I like the over all thought of the piece, it's very creative. Just a few silly mistakes: If I was old enough , I would drink my sorrows away ...

    Mar 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Life and Death

    I like this little thought of yours. I ask myself that same question a lot to. I think everyone does In my opinion death is just your retirement from life. ...

    Mar 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: So get out

    I Loved this poem. It's absolutely brilliant. I can feel you're emotions and all the thoughts that you've had on this journey; and that ( in my opinion) is how ...

    Mar 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: I'm Sorry

    Hello, this is really a cool iambic pentameter. It's a little sad, but its understandable... it's something we can all relate to. I found one mistake though: The line "Wishing ...

    Feb 28, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: I hate my life.

    Ireally like this. It deeply shows how growing up is rough. I can easily connect with this, and I'm sure almost everyone here can too. I really like how there's ...

    Feb 15, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Save Me

    D Singer, this is amazing. I love everything about it, especially you're structure. I love the single word lines. It says so much in such little. I adore this structure. ...

    Feb 10, 2011
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Help Wanted

    Wow, I really liked this piece. It had really good structure. There were a couple silly mistakes you made though: spelling, grammar, capitalization... no biggies though. also Why did i ...

    Feb 9, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Running

    Hey Juju, This story is quite interesting. It definitely kept me on my toes. The end was unexpected; but I agree with BornToShop. When you write my mom woke me ...

    Feb 8, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Deleted.

    I liked it. I agree with ^ with grammer, but other than that, I like it. to me, it ties together very well.I also liked how you used different aspects ...

    Feb 8, 2011


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