Noelle

In this chapter I was trying to slow down the pace a little, give the readers a break. Plus it's the first time I've used Leo's point of view so ...

Hi there! Oh my gosh...I'm so, so excited to see what happens next. My eyes were glued to the screen while I was reading this. You've built up so much ...

Hi there! Wow. All I can say is wow. I really don't have anything to say in this review, so I'm just going to tell you that this chapter captivated ...

Elle is just pronounced as L. And I'm glad you felt the tension, that's what I wanted you to get out of it :)

Hi there! Now it was a lone wolf indistinguishable upon the unyielding land. *I love the metaphor :) I love this chapter. It gives a good inside look at the ...

Hi there! I'm very interested in this. Since this is a prologue I'm not going to harp on the lack of detail about the girl. I wish I could have ...

Hi there! I don't have much to say about this chapter. I enjoyed it and it definitely moved the plot along. The ending was great. It really got me thinking. ...

You know, I wasn't thinking of the Hunger Games when I was writing this, but you're the second person to compare the two. I guess my subconscious wanted this to ...

Hi there! This chapter is really good. I couldn't stop reading. I was so upset when I got to the end. The beginning was great. I like your description of ...

Didn't mean to hit the submit button yet... -_-

Maybe. The codes are tricky though, it took me a while to get them

Oops...the code to make it center didn't show up. Here's the link for codes to use on the site: There's a bunch here.

You'll find out more about Leo in later chapters :)

Hi there! From a reader's view point I think this is a great start. You didn't kill any suspense and I definitely want to read more. I really want to ...

Hi there! (again) I don't want to say this is much better because the original was good too, but this is great! I'm impressed that you went back and edited ...