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Noelle

if we didn't have words to read, write, and speak, I think I would die

  • Poetry » Fantasy, Other Re: Broken Souls

    Hi there! And even then he didn't know what that meant . S o I let my bones poke out of my skin and show how skinny I was and ...

    Aug 7, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Satire Re: Verita Fetcher: Prologue: The Bearer of Truth

    Hi there! Yay! Another novel for me to read ^_^ Hm...I think the second 'Oh, silly you' is a bit overkill. It's already been mentioned in the first line. If ...

    Aug 7, 2014
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Satire Re: Words to Salve

    Hi there! I'm not a poetry person, but I do know a little something about poetry. So I'm going to take a look at this short little poem you've got ...

    Aug 7, 2014
  • Short Story » Horror, Fantasy Re: Battle Arena 1: Exiting Short Story: A Cloud Of Darkness

    Hi there! As one the three men slashed Just a nitpick here. There should be a comma after the word 'one'. The woman fell to her knees convulsing as the ...

    Aug 7, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: The Prophet's Daughter Excerpt

    Hi there! Therese has already pointed out the nitpicks so I'm going to focus on everything else :) Had my parents scheduled a training session and not warned me? They ...

    Aug 5, 2014
  • Poetry » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Crystal Child Part 1

    Hi there! Poetry isn't my strong point so I'm just here to give you a review of what I think of this overall. I'll be focusing more on the feel ...

    Aug 5, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Fantasy Re: The Chains of Duty Chapter 3:The Twins

    Hi there! About time I got around to this, right? Sorry I've been a bit busy. But I'm here to review now! :D Immediately, the throne room began to slowly ...

    Aug 5, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Culture Re: Goals of two types: Spencers Adventures Intro.

    Hi there! So, first thing I noticed when I first saw this was that the paragraphs are long. There are only three paragraphs in this entire chapter. Even shorter chapters ...

    Aug 4, 2014
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Fantasy Re: Rooftops, Guards and the Fire of a Young Mans Heart

    Hi there! Many rumors circulate about these rare and extraordinarily gifted men and women . and A t the darkest parts of night you can hear old men tell stories ...

    Aug 4, 2014
  • Poetry » Technology, Culture Re: Remember our pattern

    Hi there! I find this a very interesting piece. It's under the category of poetry, yet it isn't in the same poetic form that I see other poetry in. As ...

    Aug 4, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Romantic Re: Instant: 1

    Hi there! Just a quick nitpick here: Half tempted to just rip both legs off Her feet were just hurting a second ago. So wouldn't she want to rip her ...

    Aug 3, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Mystery / Suspense Re: Life As A Criminal Book 2 Prolouge

    Hi there! Before I start the review, I just want you to keep in mind that I haven't read Book 1. After reading this though, I think I'll go back ...

    Aug 3, 2014
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Romantic Re: True Love

    Hi there! My heart swells as I stare into his lovely, pale blue eyes. The s ide of his face is illuminated At this point I don't know who this ...

    Aug 2, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Dramatic Re: For Everly: Chapter 3: Family

    Hi there! Dad builds a sandcastle with seven-year-old Everly So you're writing this in first person. But this right here is written in third person. Now, I know it's a ...

    Aug 2, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Syrin: Chapter 15 (Part 1)

    Hi there! About time I got these reviews done, huh? So here we get to learn more about Ashley and her history. That's good seeing as we didn't really know ...

    Aug 2, 2014


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