Noelle

Hi there! I'm a little on the fence here with the author's interference in this chapter. It's nice to have the other perspective like I said, but here it sort ...

Hi there! One quick thing before I start on this chapter. I think the author is a great addition to the story. I know I've told you before, but it's ...

Hi there! “Really?” he cried loudly When I think of someone crying out, I think of it as something of desperation, where they're trying anything and everything to get someone ...

Hi there! I'm ready to review now. I promise I won't break down on you in this chapter :) I have to say, this journal is a good catalyst to ...

Hi there! Writer gave you a really good review so I'm going to do the best I can to add to it. Hopefully I can help you out too! :) ...

Hi there! Noelle here for a Review Day review. Psh, Wolf knew that she was going to beat me here. Ah, that's why I didn't review this for a while. ...

Hi there! Noelle back again. Obi is so controlling of everything and it's completely obvious here. He wants everything to be perfect and go the way he plans. So it ...

Hi there! Noelle back again. Qui’in walked at a leisurely pace, arms swinging relaxed at her sides. Saying that her arms swung relaxed by her side seems a bit contradictory. ...

Hi there! Noelle back again. It seems that you've switched to Conya's point of view here. I actually like it, getting to see things through her eyes for once. However, ...

Hi there! Noelle back again. He wasn’t dawdling. He wasn’t avoiding the upcoming conversation with this new Conya that had confronted him so openly in the parlor. He wasn’t the ...

Hi there! Noelle back again. Silently, Obi did so and focused on his breaths. I feel like with the word 'silently' at the beginning is awkward. Putting it after the ...

Hi there! Noelle back for another Review Day review Perhaps a jazz club? A nice place where he could sit in a corner and let music wash over him while ...

Hi there! Noelle back for another Review Day review! We're back to Lekan's point of view. Yes! I have to admit, I was a bit confused with the memories that ...

Hi there! Noelle here for a Review Day review! I know that I've praised you on your character in like, every review, but I'm going to do it here too ...

Hi there! Noelle back again. I'm at the last part! :'( Wold involuntarily takes a step back. This slips back into third person. Racen wouldn't know if Wold steps back ...