Niebla

Hello TheSwordsman, thank you for sharing your story with us. ^^ First off, this is a nice little plot with some engaging twists that kept me focused on reading, and ...

Hi SharraeWilson, To begin with my overall impression: this wasn’t terrible. The chapter is written well enough for me to keep on reading right to the end without needing to ...

Hey Dragofriend1234, When I started reading this, it didn’t do much to draw me in. I’ve read similar beginnings so many times before: a teenage girl, crying, alone, in pain, ...

Hi CallMeDee, So far, I haven’t been able to get much out of this, even when I try to ignore the punctuation errors. There’s a lot missing, and overall it ...

Hi LittleFox, I’ve read over the first chapter as well as this one but thought I’d just sum everything up here in one review rather than reviewing each one separately. ...

Hi there, mystogan – Sorry for the super late review, and no problem about the reviews so far; I’m really glad I’ve been able to be of some help, and ...

Hi there, Shiksha, From the moment I started reading this I could tell that it was going to be a dramatic story – and in that sense, I wasn’t disappointed. ...

Hi SolitaryCanary, I’ve read this a few times, and I’m still not really sure what it’s meant to be. The title certainly seems to fit: the words do seem rushed, ...

Hi there, thebookthief, I’ll get straight to the point with this review. What drew me in most about this was the summary: dystopian fiction can always be interesting, and I ...

Hi creativityrules, I enjoyed reading this; while all that is really going on is reflection on his broken family and broken life, the character really brings the story to life ...

Hi Legibletext. :) Hm, okay, so there is definitely a lot of emotion here, and a clear idea beginning to come through, but honestly, I have trouble reading this as ...

Hello, ambeezyk, Niebla here with a review for you. :) As the title says, this is a first draft so I’m going to let myself really rip into it and ...

Hi Shiksha! I see that pettybage has already covered most of the more particular details in this, so I’m going to focus on the chapter and the story as a ...

Hey mystogan! Okay, I’m going to be completely honest here and say that I have really mixed feelings about this. The main thing I like about this is the way ...

Hello again! ^^ I see that this chapter already has plenty of reviews, but I’ll add mine in anyway. This has really improved from the first chapter – there’s a ...