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Hi, It is a nice poem and really real. Like Epic said it started of a bit cliche but as you keep reading you find out that it is so ...

This is a good poem! It was a bit disappointing though because I feel as if it could have more emotion in it! The emotion is there but I just ...

hi, this is a good poem and i really enjoyed it! I like the rhythm and found that the rhyme didn't sound forced. The one thing i don't really like ...

hi there, firstly welcome! Secondly good job! This is not a bad poem and it really paints a great picture about the garden. Your grammar and spelling is fine but ...

Okay, Firstly this is no way a horrible poem! It is extremely sad and depressing but they way that you have written it isn't horrible! It has a nice flow ...

hi, I really enjoyed this poem. It was a bit lacking though, it just needs something else that will really bring it up another level. I don't like the lines ...

Hi, This is a dark poem but it isn't obviously, in your face dark. It doesn't use darks words so much as weaves it into the Poem. You use some ...

Hey, It's a good start and builds up a sort of suspense and mystery. it doesn't really tell us much about the story or anything which may be good or ...

Hey, Most of the other reviewers have summed most of it up. It is rather full on and a bit disjointed. The first line that says, do not take it ...

Hi, First this needs some serious redoing. Not because it is bad but because it isn't really anything. It is like a quote or saying but not a story, poem ...

Hi, This is a great poem and like alliyah said really paints how the character is feeling. I do really love the use of repetition. It really shows how the ...

Hi there, Okay I will start with a few nitpicks. 1) You have made a few errors which need fixing. 'He looked at me strangely me' need to get rid ...

Ok so first things first. It is a good prologue. I like the way you've set it up and introduced as to the characters and their situation. You have used ...

Hiya, This isn't that bad, in fact it is rather good. You have made a few mistakes grammatically and spelling wise. Just re-read it and you should be able to ...

Hey, I didn't read all of it but may when I have more time. You have set up beautifully and your character up well too. I like the overall idea ...