NaRachel

Hey, I really like this! I especially like the half crossed out part, the fact that you've done that makes it really interesting just visually. A couple of parts didn't ...

Hey, This is really impressive, I really, really liked it. Well done :) I thought the flow and the way you have broken up the lines works really well. I ...

Hey :) I liked the flow of this song and am curious as to how it sounds. I was a bit confused about the meaning of some parts. I particularly ...

Hi! I must say that at first I thought this poem would be a little cliche, simply from its title but found that it was quite the opposite! There was ...

Hi! Firstly, I'd like to say that some of your sentences are too long, remember that each sentence should contain only one idea (just as a general rule) :) I ...

Hi :) I liked the feeling behind this poem, I think you expressed the emotions well! Just a few technicalities, you dont have to begin every line with a capital ...

Hi :) I liked these, you used some interesting and unique metaphors such as glass mattress, pretty brown cats, green grass turned brown etc. My favourite part was the last ...

Hey, first of all I'm really excited for you as you are obviously proud of this piece. Second of all, I have no idea what you're talking about for the ...

Wow the format of this is really interesting and exciting, mainly created by the short lines of rhyme! :) I really loved it! I have absolutely no criticisms, I especially ...

First of all, nice signature quote :) Okay the first problem I had with reading this is that it didn't rhyme enough... people like ryhmes, think about reading poems, I ...

Hey, I just reviewed your other piece "The Water", looks like you're really getting into the writing which is great! I liked this one better than you're other. I think ...

Hey :) I like the flow of this song, it works pretty well. Also the theme is good- admittedly its verging on cliche but I think thats okay.There were some ...

Okay :) I think some sentences are just a little too simple and obvious. For example : I'm all that is left of the Jordan family . Try not to ...

Aww its kinda cute. You're right, technically speaking its not the greatest poem but its alright. You can tell its written by someone young because of the cliche opinion of ...

Oooooh, interesting... I like it! I know War is a pretty common theme but I still like it. I love its ambiguity; it kind of flashes in and out if ...