Myriadne

I loved the line "but you could always fake expensive things like love". I liked this one a lot. You have captured something here and it is brilliant.

I really like this poem, you have a great sense of language and how to make words work well together.

I really like this, you really capture the essence of your character. I do think however that the third stanza jarrs the flow of the poem a bit, it is ...

Very nicely written, you have quite a tight structure and it flows well. Its very well balanced and easy to read, I quite like it :)

Thanks for the comments, I guess you are right about "etch" I might change it.

It starts of well but looses its threads as it goes on, I think you need to tighten your style and focus the poem more.

Hee just thought I'd blow my own trumpet a bit but this poem has been published :) in an anthology of teenage writing.

This baisically a piece of prose, nice message, but to me it is prose not poetry.

While I don't think that poetry needs purpose, this didint really hold me. You haven't captured the emotion. What I would say is go back and re-write, and try and ...

I really liked this one and don't have any crit :) great job, this poem really speaks to me.

Galatea, your poetry is wonderful, like a fine wine that goes down smoothly but is intensely intoxicating. You have such a wonderful way with words, bravo with this piece.

I didint really like it on first reading, but on second reading I picked up lots of little nuances and images that I really like. This one of those poems ...

Thanks for the comments and crit I really appreciate it :)

Your rhyme scheme is good, its natural and doesn't seem forced. I think you have done a good job with this poem.

I think this is a truly excellent poem because it actually made me feel something. Wonderfully written, I have no critiscism at all.