Young Writers Society

i have nothing to really say because everyone already said it but i will say that i liked the message it gave that even if your poor it dosn't matter because even though your poor you have things rich people don't have

good job and keep writing

---Jon---

there are so many meanings in this poem, and that is what makes it good. i hear your voice throughout the poem, and i love what it is saying. you are very talented keep up the awesome work

I didint really like it on first reading, but on second reading I picked up lots of little nuances and images that I really like. This one of those poems that picks up more layers of meaning each time you read it. Good job.

i like it, though for some reason i got the image of an old wooden house with creaky wooden, well everything really standing on a tall hill in the clear backdrop of a nights sky. i dont kniow why you needed to know that but i like this poem.

haha...in tiny font, "burn the rich," that's funny. okay...lemme think

I like this because it has a really nice flow, and it gives me an awesome picture. The one line i don't like is, "but it's still nice to think about," it didn't seem to flow.

i couldn't care less about sweating at night
in archaic houses with a waterbug problem. *archaic...good word!*
we don't need air conditioning, just watch,
we'll show every one of them *haha! That made me laugh!*

i'm existing where i first existed,
tracing my roots like they were
the curve of your back, my palm
pressing down at all the right spots. *I like the comparasin there.*

anyways that's all I've got. Good poem, I like it.

*laughs again* burn the rich...