Morrigan

Hi there Emmy! Okay, the first thing I have to tell you is a formatting thing. Single space this. I know on Word it wants to do that weird "add ...

Hi there, Mochi. This is quite good. I really like it. Your meter is really good, and you don't use an obnoxious rhyme scheme to reinforce it. That's good. That's ...

Hi there, letiki. Your meter, for the most part, is very good, and your rhyme scheme isn't half bad, either. That being said, there are a few things I'd like ...

Hi there, and welcome to YWS if I haven't welcomed you already! Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions. I appreciate your idea. A good night's sleep ...

Hi there. Gosh, you're right. That ending got me. He went all this way... to McDonald's. Your beginning is actually quite good. None of the rhymes there sound forced, and ...

Hi, Ree! =D Well. I don't think I've ever read a poem about vomiting before. But it's about more than that, isn't it? It's about the woman's reaction. Yes? Unless ...

Hi there, phoenix! Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions. Honestly, I was bored during the first stanza. It's very bland. The whole poem is in need ...

Hi there, LifeUnknown, and welcome to YWS! You have a good start here. You use some images to illustrate what you're feeling. Good. I do have some suggestions for improvement, ...

Hi there, Audy. Wow. This is beautiful. I love the layout and the pacing. It's about the cold, and you do a good job of keeping it slow to parallel ...

Hi there, again, dogs. I had some time to look at this again, and I decided I would, since you revised it. As I said in my previous review, it ...

hi there, Loller. Gosh darn it, that was good. I don't often say that. But this? Right here? You got it. That being said, I do have a few things ...

Hi there, sparkle. You must have edited this before I got to it the first time. I suggest changing your description. It's not a short poem any longer =). Before ...

Hi there, rabbit. I really like how you formatted this, with the one line, and then the question. And the feeling it evokes is awesome. Nice. As with almost all ...

Hi there. Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions. The first thing I noticed about your poem was the punctuation. I've never seen punctuation like this in ...

Hi there, Chelbig. Welcome to YWS. Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions. The first suggestion I'd like to make for change is more punctuation. It would ...