Morrigan

Hi there, guineapiggirl! I liked this a lot more than I thought I was going to. I read the description, and I thought it was going to be rather mushy ...

Hi there! I'm here to rescue this from the Green Room! I didn't read the first chapter, but I can tell what's going on. I like this. It's intriguing, and ...

Hello~ I'm here to rescue this from the Green Room! For a first chapter, there's not a lot of exposition and a lot of action. This isn't necessarily a bad ...

Hello! I can't believe this beautiful piece is still in the Green Room! I love your imagery and the descriptions of sunset and dawn. I'm assuming this is about your ...

Hello, guineapiggirl! I'm here to review your poem on this fine review day. I think this is a nice idea-- I like it when poets find inspiration from other poetry ...

Hello! I'm here to rescue this from the Green Room. While I haven't read the other chapters of this, I was able to figure out what was going on. I ...

Hello! I'm here to rescue this from the Green Room! I haven't read the previous chapters, but I'm able to understand what's going on here. This is an important chapter. ...

Hello! I'm here to rescue this from the Green Room! I wish I could rescue your mermaid! I like mermaid stories a lot, so when I started reading this I ...

Hello, IceWinifredd! I'm here to rescue this from the Green Room! Generally, I like the pacing and the way you build excitement until you leave us at a nice cliffhanger. ...

Hello! I'm here to rescue this from the Green Room! Because I have not read your other chapters, I might question things that are explained in other chapters. Let's begin, ...

Hello! Treat every chapter as if your reader has put the book down in between it and the previous chapter. Remind us more of what has happened. It seems strange ...

Hello! I'm here to rescue this from the Green Room! The reason that this has been in the green room for so long is because it is so long. Many ...

Hello! I'm here to rescue this from the Green Room. I agree with everything that Rydia said. Watch out for typos, and make characters speak consistently. Coming from my older-person ...

Hello, Pomp~ I'm here to rescue this from the Green Room on this fine Review Day. Overall, I really liked this. You do a nice job incorporating the physicality of ...

Hello, Meandbooks! While I haven't read the other chapters of your novel, this is written well enough that I understand what's going on. It was pretty hard to find things ...