Mo.

Thanks for the reviews guys! They're really helpfull, and I'll keep all of what you've said in mind. :)

Thanks heaps for the comments guys, they're really helpful, I'll work on it. :)

Thanks for the review Snoink! I'll work on that. :D

Thanks for all the lovely reviews guys. :D

Wow. This is a really pretty, and interesting idea. It's really good. I really liked it. The theory is really interesting. It makes me want to read more. It's makes ...

Awesome! *bows*

Thanks heaps for the reviews! I'll keep working on it. :D

Thanks heaps for the reviews! I think I've fixed everything you've mentioned! :D ~Mo.

Hello. I thought this was a good, well told piece, and I didn't see an grammatical errors. The only thing I found, was that when Rebbecca talks to her children ...

I am very happy to see that I come back, a few minutes later, and everything I have mentioned is fixed!! Yay for Pugs!!! :D ~Mo.

Okay, fixed a bit (I'm pretty sure I've fixed everything that has been mentioned, if not most), also tweaked a few lines. What do you think? ~Mo. xD

Okay, I think I have fixed everything, (if not most) of the things mentioned. The flow? It doesn't really have a poetic sort of feel (yet), so I shall be ...

I think I've fixed everything you guys have mentioned. Thanks for the reviews. :D ~Mo.

I think I have fixed everything you mentioned. :D Thanks heaps for the review!!! ~Mo.

Thanks, will do. I agree with the history thing. And well yeah, it still needs a bit of work. Thanks heaps for the review. ~Mo. :D