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Hello, there, AngelMarie! I hope your holidays are going well. Alright, on to the actual review now. Please be aware that corrections will be in red! As I stare into ...

Hello there, James! Fun idea you have here! I myself write fanfiction, but generally I stick within one story realm. It can be quite fun, can't it? Anyways, on to ...

Hello there, RoseGryffindor. I'm suspecting you are a Harry Potter fan by your username; we have a common love, then. Anyways, the fact that characters tend to not go to ...

Hello there, Nike! :) Nitpicks/Comments Maybe the thing between us is, um, uh. This is incoherent rambling; you're an author, and this is your character, so it's your choice - ...

Hello there, Kyladoot! :) Carla listened contentedly to the snick of scissors, I like how you substituted snick for snick; it adds a bit of originality. As pieces of blond ...

Hello there, mayendejoel! Oh, and welcome to the Young Writers Society. First of all, I'd like to say that, in general, we don't use all-CAPS when posting our works. It ...

Hello there, MikaFreak123! :) Nitpicks and Comments I heard her foot steps up the stairs. Footsteps is one word, not two. ;) "Ellie, I let it on your bed." She ...

Hello there, WickedDestiny! :) Nitpicks and Comments I stared at his picture , then looked down at the chat. You forgot a comma after the word picture. I had said ...

Hello there, danceforevergirl! Also, welcome to the Young Writers Society. If you ever need anything, just PM me. Nitpicks I tried to stop her , but it was too late. ...

Hello there, Emmylou! :) Nitpicks The young woman’s silver eyes sparkled like the moon and stars. On the contrary, the moon does not sparkle, though the stars do. Instead of ...

Hello there, AsxLoversxGo! And welcome to the Young Writers Society, as well. :) Nitpicks In fact, it’s not as dangerous as the world I’m living right now. If you have ...

Hello there, CaptianRandom! :) Let me begin by urging you to take the time and visit forums to help your knowledge in poetry structure & basic style (also grammar/punctuation, too!). ...

Hello there, Eddie! ;) My house is quite, Like the forest With a leaky roof, and one person That needs to find their way out. I quite liked this first ...

This doesn't deserve to be picked apart and critiqued... nothing can critique the passion of a love of The Young Writer's Society. That, my friends, would be beyond criminal. Indeed ...

Hey there, Fixed! =D Your hand shoots up to feel the cut-- you forget how disgusting your hands were . A period was needed here. momentarily, you're shocked: you see ...