Published September 16, 2010
Dear YWS,
Your involvement in my life is significantly affecting my sleep, social life, and even my grades. The call of your lovely font is slowly driving me insane. I am drawn like a moth to a light bulb. My head spins with jealousy when someone else is with you for a single moment more than I. The smell of your blueberry chat room, the touch of your loving, gentle reviews, the sound of your forums whispering my name- all of these things contribute to my madness. I am entranced with you. When I see you on the internet, my heart beats rapidly, and my face flushes red. When our chat messages coincide, creating a cacophony of dinging, I feel my stomach jump with joy at our perfect harmony.
Destiny brought us to this single URL, bound together by a mutual love of all things blue. When I searched Google for writer's websites and found your name, I knew at once we were meant to be. It was love at first view. The way you called me guest made me jealous of others whom you knew by name, and when I registered, I tried desperately to pick a name that would make you smile.
Oh, YWS, my love is true. Distance, other lovers, and your inanimate status cannot keep us apart. I would sift through the internet, sacrifice my many browsers, and deactivate my Facebook account just to be with you. At night I lie awake thinking of your PMs and wondering what we will discuss on the morn. There are many who love you but none who's love is as pure as mine. Love me, YWS, for my heart is already yours.
With love,
Silly Ducky
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I loved it!!! It's like a disease it follows you everywhere. I go to sleep thinking about what I want to read next or review next. This is soo true. I loved it so much!
Wicked <3
That's so nunu-pie! But warning. look at everyone! I smell a playa! YWS IS A PLAYA!
Hahaha... YWS is cheating on you with me. Just so you know!
My main critique would be that you mentioned this in the beginning:
"Your involvement in my life is significantly affecting my sleep, social life, and even my grades."
I have to wonder with this exactly how it is affecting you! So, a couple of anecdotes would be wonderful here.
But, truly, this is a magnificent love letter!
Hi sillyducky! I'm SporkPunk, and I'll be reviewing this!
I know I'm really late on this, but I kept forgetting to review it after I saw it. It's awesome, brilliant, wonderful, phantasmagorical. I think you captured exactly how everyone feels about YWS, and the imagery is brilliant, especially blueberry chat room. I loved that. I can bring myself to tear this apart. I'm going to go all pseudo-philosophical and say that the imperfections, combined with the brilliance represent what YWS is all about. Improving our writing, and becoming all the better for it.
This was great.
Sporks
I love the "blueberry chat room" line!
I absolutely loved this! It was very real and it was cute and amusing.
Good job! I really like your writing style too :]
Very good ^-^. I think a lot of us feel similarly about YWS (or have once before). I just have one complaint: too much description. It's like cutting a twig with a chainsaw when you could have just done it yourself. Like being forced to eat the whole Thanksgiving Turkey. Like putting 16 gigs of RAM in a computer. Like buying a 500 gig mp3 player and only listening to music on it. Like putting so many frozen dinners in your refrigerator that you can't shut the door. Like drinking a milkshake too fast and getting a brainfreeze.
Or, just like the paragraph above -_^. Haha, good job, and keep writing!
I love it so much! I can't nitpick it! It's all so true.... Brava!
I love it, Duck! I think this would be great as an advertisement or even as a foreword in the literary journal when it next comes out. Beautiful. I don't have anything to pick at...so that should tell you a lot. Here's one bit of advice, and then I'll say I love it once more...
While the word 'dinging' is accurate, it's one of those onomatopoeias that just make me cringe. Iunno. Maybe it's just me. Maybe a more melodious sound would be wonderful here. However, I love the use of 'cacophony'.
Beautiful! <3!!!
-Lumiface
Indeed it would be, Skins.
Anyways, nice job here, Ducky. This was completely genius.
Thanks everyone!
I have never agreed with anybody more! A love of YWS just can't be picked at...Beyond criminal indeed. xD
Seems like YWS gets around
Nawwwwww... This is awesome!
Haha excellent in every way, true and well written.
Props,
Day
Pure poetry.
Skins is right. This doesn't deserve to be picked apart. It's special and perfect just the way it is. The imagery is great and emotion flows right off the "page". You've touched us all, SillyDucky. Bravo! Bravo!
There is nothing more to be said.
Write on!
Lette
In one word i would say it is brilliant.
So very, very true...
This doesn't deserve to be picked apart and critiqued... nothing can critique the passion of a love of The Young Writer's Society. That, my friends, would be beyond criminal.
Plus, you made the chatroom sound edible... blueberry's...
*Stands up with a slow clap* Just amazing. Brought a tear to my eye! In a good way, of course.
(♥ it ♥ it ♥ it ♥ it) x A MILLION!
Awe. Some. XD
Just for the heck of it, I'm going to nitpick (because I feels like it).
Get rid of the "for you." You go on to say that, and it hinders the flow.
I believe you mean "In the morn."
lol That's really all I could find. But I just gotta say, this made my day. XD *likes* *loves* *stalks*
loveness, ultraviolet <3