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  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Pure

    Hmm. This is...okay. Not great, not good, not awesomesauce, just okay. I didn't like the bold font. It annoyed me. I don't need fonts to tell me how it's said. ...

    Jan 17, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Hopes and Dreams

    Hey, there. Hope you're having a good day! Anyhoo, I like what you're poem's wishes are--so nice of things, what every human wants, in a way. I do think you ...

    Jan 12, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Snowflake Garden

    Hi! Nice poem you've made here. I really like it. I didn't like how you repeated "the bittersweet chills". It felt overused, out of place, and made me question the ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Friends

    Hi, there! I like this poem. It's a very sad subject--losing a childhood friend is so very hard--but you wrote it well. It seemed very neutral, not a poem that ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Are we all gone?

    Hey! Great poem, here. You've done a really fantastic job. I like this a lot. The second version you wrote is better than the first by far--miles. I was already ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Fake Everything

    Hi, there! Nice poem, here. As a few others have said, this is very simple and short--which isn't a bad thing at all, if that's how you want it to ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Broken Mirror

    This was okay. Strictly okay. As Kamas said, it needed to have more of a graceful language to pull this off correctly. Maybe saying something different then what you said--because ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Ode to the Gambler (Victory)

    Hey, Howler! Nice subject of poetry you've chosen--luck and chance! So very cool. And unique, even better.The poem itself isn't fabolous, but it's okay. I really like the idea, though. ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Mom

    First of all, I love this--the subject, the way it's written, it's beautiful. Tears would have come to my eyes if I was one of those people who cry at ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Deleted

    Hi. Nice work, here. :) I think that if you branched out from just describing this and add more, it'd be much better. Also, maybe keep the lines a little ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Place

    Hi. Nice work here, to start. It has very nice flow, and the simplicity of it all adds to the nothingness feeling as Amy pointed out. I like that! Also, ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Butterfly Shaped Stains

    Hi Red--just a quick overview of what I think! You use half rhymes, as a few others have said. Flow is key. And that means the rhymes have to fit ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Losing Faith

    This is okay--one dimensional, as Kamas said. The rhyme here is quite nice, so good job on that. I like the whole point of the poem, the idea. It interested ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Memories of Autumn

    Hey, Kyousuke! Great work here. I'm a big fan of autumn, and the leaves and colors are my favorite part. I'm partial to this, to say. But as Hope mentioned, ...

    Jan 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Daphne

    Hiya Flit! This is a half/half beautiful poem--a sort of. It flowed very well, which makes it easy to read and very enjoyable. The writing style you use is spectacular, ...

    Jan 9, 2010


I am and always will be optimist, the hoper of far-flung hopes, the dreamer of improbable dreams.
— 11th Doctor