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Hey Yuriiko, I thought it was a beautiful poem. It flowed just so smoothly, and was so heart-felt and the description of your feelings was amazing. It was so gentle, ...

Hey Cap and Cap's cousin! I really enjoyed this poem! I like the comparison between lightning and anger! I liked it because it was something really good tok compare it ...

Hey Kingolions! To be honest, this poem wasn't too bad. Personally, I liked some of your other ones better, but this was nice and short. For some reason, I think ...

Hi Kingolions, I thought it was a pretty good poem! Didn't mind it too much! But here are some things that could use touching up: I love the meaning behind ...

Hi Cap! I'll start off by saying the setting for this poem was very calm and relaxing. Beach strolls are always popular. But, I didn't think that this was much ...

Hi Cap! This poem was good to a certain point. It was a nice, simple, quiet poem and I felt I could relate to some parts. But then you go: ...

Hi Cap, It was a good concept, not for a poem though. I think if you made this a story and added a bit of fiction and depth, it would ...

Hi CaptainRandom, Well done on the poem! I thought this was one of your better pieces. I agree with the others, this is structured very well, even if most of ...

Hi Watchmeburn, Its a good try for your first story. But there were some issues with it. Number one: the person takes some pills out of a bottle and then ...

CaptainRandom, This isn't really a poem. I agree with RepublicOfCoter - start a blog. I recommend taking a look at some other users' poems such as RepublicOfCoter or Yuriiko to ...

CaptainRandom, I'm going to be upfront and honest with you. This is not a poem! Your just talking about different aspects of rain and a description of these aspects if ...

Hi Yuriiko, Loved your poem, for some reason I found it pretty smooth (a few bumps here and there) but smooth. I also really love the title: 'Happy Endings for ...

I thought it was a good poem. Definitely something this world can aspire to, people uniting and spreading love and aiming and taking ourselves higher. Great work! I have to ...

Hi Captain Random, I'll be honest, it wasn't much of a poem. It was more questioning life after death instead of poetry. The concept of the poem isn't too bad, ...

Really liked this poem. Your description of what the world truly is, is very real. But, your emotions when you got shot - very dramatic, not realistic though, don't think ...