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This poem is like a sigh.
It's full of longing and beauty and I love it.
I love this sooo much, everything about it.
God, that was lovely

Hey Yuriiko,

I thought it was a beautiful poem. It flowed just so smoothly, and was so heart-felt and the description of your feelings was amazing. It was so gentle, yet meaningful to read, and I loved reading it. I love the wording in this:
"The birds in the air were singing sweetly" - loved that line!

"The flowers were dancing gracefully" is another line I adore. The imagery (as someone said) is really good. There are bits of this poem that are just sunny and make me smile when I read them. I also see you've tweaked it up a little, good work.

I felt this really came from deep within you, and I felt the emotion too. I got it. It was an amazing poem, and I absolutely love reading your pieces. My best wishes for your future writing!

Redleaf

I agree with Izzy. It's a very nice poem, but there are a few things I'd like to say.

Not only is it hard to understand, but the grammar isn't right in the phrase:

Now, I really do is to forget, I was right

I really like the idea of this poem, I like the images that you used like the "flowers dancing gracefully".

My only criticism is that some of the lines don't really make sense, it's quite confusing. For example, when you say "Now, I really do is to forget, I was right". I don't know if you wrote it like this intentionally but maybe you could tweak a few lines so it's easier to understand.

Just one more small thing is that the grammar is a bit wrong in some places like "The birds in the air was singing sweetly". It should be were. Just little things like that but otherwise it's a really nice poem and flows nicely